i really love this story so far!

I was wondering who was king of thieves but, MAREK!

That's awesome! This is just too awesome! Please update!!1

Very nice indeed. But you could work on your spelling. Otherwise, I bow down to you.

Damon's a bit of Neal isn't he? Ria's nice - but she appears too impersonal to be the heroine.

Put a bit more of "human spice" into her - the story'll be lovely then.

You wound me greatly. I did almost die waiting. And now you answered one of the suspenseful questions, and left the other ones hanging. I hope you do not have to run after tomatoes again.I think that at some point you should introduce the other members of the prophesy. Inless of course you are goign to finish this without adding the others and making sequels. Which would kill us loyal reviewers who are waiting for the end and yet wishing this would go on forever. Now, wouldn't Marek be a bit old at that point in time. I mean he was a bit younger than George but wouldn't George and thus marek be in their forties. I enjoy fan-fics with Marek, but wouldn't he be a bit old to be King of Thieves? Otherwise god writting as always and a little bit more suspense(you will kill us someday).
Good work,
flyery
PS: Thank you for dedicating this to me among others

o so exciting! sounds like something that came out of Aladdin sort of...in a very distant way...ANYHOO!...how do you say Yroix?...is it like "ya-roy" or "ee-rocks" or "yer-oyks"??please do tell!i'm wondering HOW CAN YOU STAND KEEPING ME WAITING LIKE THIS!?!?!?! but the whole curled into a ball in some guy's arms reminds me of a time when I was six and my uncle tried to stuff me under his shirt cuz we were playing hide and seek and my brother was about to find me...ya...very strange, my family is...i guess that's what happens when you're dutch...WOO HOO!!GO PENNY PINCHERS!ahem...

I wonder what happened to those tall men...hmm... no i really don't wonder. I think I know but you can write the next chap about what happened and I'll compare my thoughts with yours.hm...Anyways the new chaps are really good.Keep up the writing and post them soon please.

Great story and you are evil, you don't tell us why Rikash wants to leave or what the letter for George is about or who saves Ria or what the Graveyard Hag will ask Rikash to do. I will die until next Sunday. I believe that you should incorporate Gary's son more into the story and Douglas. I also believe that Ria shouldn't be able to be on such good terms with the other lady knights, I mean I love scenes with them in them but I don't believe that the conservaties would allow that. Just a suggestion, hope you continue soon.
Very good story, flyery

so good!update ASAP!love it!keep writing!you ARE evil..i agree...but i still love you.not in the gross girl/girl way...UPDATE SUPER FAST !

if u dont update soon ill stop reading. i need to reald this one! im obsesed with it

Untill recently, your story was remarkably like Tamora Pierce's, but with different names. But it has just taken a turn for the better. You are a very good author; please keep writing!

just thought i'd point ou that if Roald got married at the same time as Neal, and uki was pregnent at the time then at the very most 'prince coram' should be 10, like ria. if he is in his 3rd year as a squire then he is 16 or 17, 3-4 years as a page 3-4 years as a squire. Not trying to be hyper-critical, but it just doesn't make sense, and I'm sure others have pointed it out. but i like the story so far! -Mags

*screams* no, anything but the suspense! save us from the evilness of suspense, i beg of you...rightyo then, moving on from my little outburst, great chappie, update soon, coz the suspense, itll be the end of us all if you dont *melodramtic sigh*

ok, that was really random making your main character go helpless. Not sure if i liked these abrupt changes from each chapter either. Maybe you should try to be a little more flowing.