Reviews for Out of work but never alone

Reviews For: Out of work but never alone

scarlettHuntress 2006-05-01 ch 11,	abusei have to admit, i'm not overly fond of this fic. first off, it starts as a lighthearted humor, quickly progressing into action and deadly warfare, and then you kill off zack even though they healed him. don't take this too much of an insult, but i'm sorry. and besides, you killed off the turks. THE TURKS!
Cimikat 2006-01-17 ch 11,	abuseWow, a lot of {bloody} deaths... T.T all my fav characters too... Anyways, a few suggestions for future fics. One of my biggest gripes is when writers clump a whole bunch of quotes from different characters together into one large, hard to discern paragraph. Its much easier to read if you start a new paragraph for each new character who speaks. Also, in Chapter 7, you had a Writers note right in the middle of a paragraph without seperating it from the rest of the story. Advice, put the note at the beginning or end of the story, so that it doesn't interupt the story. Overall, not too bad. Imo there was way too much unnecessary violence, but whatever.
Mr. Peachfuzz 2006-01-17 ch 11,	abuseOMG NO! Zack's dead! ;.; And poor Sephy... What an... interesting twist to the story... HOJO! dun dun dun
Raven6 2006-01-11 ch 6,	abuseI will continue to review! It's good that you're sending them over to Cloud now. Heheheh. I can't believe Zack slipped Sephiroth some drugs! That was hilarious! Keep up the work.
Mr. Peachfuzz 2006-01-11 ch 6,	abuseOh boyo. I have a bad feeling about this LOL. Well, keep writing! This is getting good! :D
Raven6 2006-01-10 ch 2,	abuseHeheh... This is pretty funny. But Zack was a Soldier, and used the Buster Sword. I think you should incorporate Cloud in this somehow. Hopefully the people arent gay, those stories are pretty creepy. Good work. (by the way, chapter 2 is labeled as chapter 3)
Mr. Peachfuzz 2006-01-09 ch 1,	abuseLADIES AND GENTS, WE HAVE A WINNER!! Seriously, this is going on my faves list. This is hilarious! Oh, silly Zack... "Withholding pies," XD. Can't wait till you update!

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