Hey! Look, to search for images of Sailor Moon in deviantart reaches this great fic! (and as mentioned deviantart, I love your gallery )

I thought it was a wonderful fic (though maybe I would have put the boys received congratulations from Kayuu and company )

Sorry for the English (google translation, you know )

female sperm? bwahahahaha XD

talk about defying genetics and biological facts.. but since this is a fiction story, I'll just convince my brain its part of your creative license...

female sperm... talk about mutation.. lol!

Heyy. I loved the story. It waz really good

Your grammar is great and there were almost no errors. The idea - though unoriginal - was a good one. But it could have been done much better. Consider this. It took quite a while for all four inner senshi to be found, originally. Time passed in between each. However, in your story, all of the men were found within the space of a few hours. That's the first thing that really bothers me. Add to that, your writing went too quickly. I read this entire fic within 2 hours. You could have added details to slow it down some. Then, in addition to telling the world who they were, - which should not be done until AFTER they are ruling - you had them tell their parents EVERYTHING. Teenagers do not share the fact that they just popped their cherries with their parents. After that, the entire world just accepts their rule within less than a week. What world is this? I know that the people of Tokyo, after having aliens attacking for the past few years, are probably used to strange things by now, but to sit aside while people crown themselves rulers of the solar system, even IF they would have earned those crowns thousands of years ago, and then to CHEER at their coronation? Sit there and think to yourself for a minute. If you suddenly came out with these abilities, this background, and decided to crown yourself Queen, would the entire world just let it happen? The ending is what really did it for me, made it unbelievable. The point of a fanfiction is to show what could have happened based on your idea, but this might as well be a Disney fairy tale!

I didn't care about the tiny details you changed and then added authors notes to - those things ARE authors prerogative since we have no clue about them. But to take an entire world which has been fighting for hundreds of years over who would rule what part and finally come to some sort of peace over it, and have them just sit idly by? The senshi are not GODS. They would never DO something like that to begin with. They want NORMAL lives. That's the entire reason behind half of the problems they face. There's also the point of the reason why they took control of Earth at all - some cataclysm involving the world freezing over. It's gone. The world didn't ask to be ruled. Didn't need it. They just decided, okay, lets rule the world on Saturday.

I wouldn't read this story again. You had good stuff in here. But it was negated by all the other stuff you pulled out of who knows where. I'd suggest you go through this again and see if there is a way to make it better.

Sorry if this hurts any feelings. I'm trying to be objective, but I don't know if its quite working.

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(deep breath) I LOVED IT!

(sigh). that was such a good story, the only thing that could have made it better would be to have a sailor moon movie or episode done out of it. well done and congrats for coming up with such a great fanfic, looking forward to reading some of your others.

hey you've read Mercedes Lackey too?

which series have you read? ive read the all the heralds of valdemar books, the gryphon ones, the kethry and tarma ones and a few of the oneshot ones.

If you like Mercedes Lackey you should try reading Tamora Pierce, she's really good as well

luved the story so far by the way, ive been dying to read story where the whole thing gets out and i was thinkning i'd have to write one myself.

Hold up a second, in the previous chapter (8) Usagi said she was 16. Now in this chapter she said that she hasn't been a virgin in three years... Ew.

Great job

Way Awsome story. Congradulations on finising it.

Can't wait, lol

Great job so far

Wicked awsome story. I can't wait to read the last chapter.

Please update soon! I want to find out what happens next!

I don't know y, but Ihate it when the senshi and stuff meet up with the news crew and stuff...yeah

lol, but they always turn out gud

I don't tihnk I made much sense in this review

:P

Please update soon! I want to find out what happens next!