Gr! You are evil I say EVIL! Why did you leave it on a cliff hanger, are you mad!
Anyway, I can't wait for more, this is a cute fic. Although I will have to say that I don't think Tomnus is going to get very tall no matter how many years have passed. This fic still rocks!
Tomnus is awesome! Whoot whoot!

Dude?! The end, a cliffy, you kill me, I really want to know what happens!

wouldn't she be older by than? not a flame but why would she still reach his waist? great story! loved it, gave me a good laugh!

Gah! What an ending. Anyway, not bad. I think the last story got the feeling just right. Good job.

Cute story>:}

This story is amazing! Ironically enough, I just had the inspiration to write a story like this, but I prefer just to read yours!

Hi! This is a sweet story. Just a couple of suggestions. One, you tend to have run-on sentences. Two, somethings are best left to the imagination rather than being excruciatingly detailed, like what dress someone is wearing (when it's not important to the story) or exactly what position two people are in in a romantic scene. Just say what is important to the story, and let the reader fill in the rest. But I think the ending here was a place where we would like to hear more of your imagination, even if it was in a metaphorical or indirect way. Like "Their lips were mere centimeters apart. In the next moment, Lucy forgot all about the water and the rest of their friends nearby. She and Tumnus were together at last." See? You don't directly say they kissed, but it's pretty well implied. And it still leaves stuff to the imagination. A good author guides her readers along the story, I think, rather than forcing them to picture everything precisely a certain way, or in the other direction, being too vague so they have to work really hard to decide what's going on. Just some thoughts! Keep writing!

I really liked this story. I hope you write more.

Hmm..It could have been worded differently, because it was hard to follow. But the ending was nice and spiffy. You hardly see those endings anymore. Open endings are so hard to come by, I try and make them, but they just complete themselves. Stories do that. I look forward to seeing more from you, Fallen.

You're killing me! Update soon.
I think you used 'tint of red too much';

HOW CUTE!! greats story!

I was doin' sixty, cruising along and...

someone slammed on the brakes. Good ending, anyhow.

As usual, I look forward to your next oneshot! Nice job!

aww, this is cute. but how could you ;eave it like that? bo. REWRITE IT SO I HAVE MY FLUFFY ENDING, DEMMIT!

wow, there's...a lot of description in here. maybe you could make it a little more concise, so it doesn't slow the pace of the story? just a suggestion, of course.

and boo. i was going to write something about ice-skating, too, since i just went on saturday. ::sniff::

but very cute and fluffy! :D

I think the rhythm of the sentences is better in this chapter. But watch your punctuation! It's there to help the reader read the story correctly!

I think your idea of how Tumnus and Lucy might feel--including the doubts and worries--is very believable. I look forward to seeing what you do with it.

I think you've kept Tumnus in believable character here. I noticed that you said he got taller, which I found odd, because I'm thinking he was fully grown when they met. He was living on his own. But, whatever. For one improvement suggestion, your sentences tend to run long. It made me feel like if he were actually saying this, he would be out of breath! Otherwise, good story.