Interesting story, and a very original idea.

I do have a couple of critiques, though. Everyone seemed very out of character, especially Virginia. She seemed to be portrayed as extremely angry and paranoid, even before Patrick was taken. Is there a backstory as to why she's acting that way? If so, it would be incredibly interesting to hear.

You may want to consider getting rid of the part about Pinocchio and the long-nose curse. In context with the entire story, it really didn't serve the plot except to poke a bit of fun at Wendell.

Also, you'll probably want to check out the special features map of The Nine Kingdoms that came on the DVD. Your geography was WAY off (for example, leaving Wendell's castle in the beginning, the travelers would only have to go east to reach The 9th Kingdom, instead of going west through The 6th Kingdom only to double-back east and then south through The 1st Kingdom).

All in all, it's a good story. Good luck with future projects.

I just love this story here and on kingdomspress. It captured my attention completely. I didn't get the part about King Wendell getting stabbed what did that mean?

I'm glad that Wolf and Virginia oh yeah and Tony got to save Patrick before it was to late.

Oh wow this is a wonderful story. I really cannot describe how fansitic this story. I even had a feeling just like Virgina that Acrotis was not who she said she was. This is one beatiful story. You should write more please!

This is an excellent story and has a good plot, but could you format it in the normal ff style? It's hard to tell where one paragraph begins and another one ends. Also, you might want to have seperate chapters for each one rather than grouping in groups of five.

I started reading the white mirror and I was capturted from the start. A very very good read and I could not put it down. Well done to the author.

I have just read the wounderful story. I can not wait to read on. well done keep them coming

OMG, this is SUCH a GOOD story. I absolutely love it. it was exsillerating thrilling, exciting etc. Keep on writing. YOu rock!

Hey! AWESOME STORY! The way you described the characters feelings was...wonderful! I emailed you more about it lol, the people who think its confusing-HOW DID YOU UNDERSTAND THE MOVIE THEN? lol UPDATE

That was *so* good! I loved it

This is really good! Great job! Continue soon! :)

*Katie*

Ohhh I like this. When shall we have some more? Onward to the time of war so that the time of peace (and happily ever after) may reign once more.

*blinks* Wow. Weird. But cool. *smiles and nods* Can't wait to finish it.

I really liked it, is there more?

There's a long, sad story behind why I replied to my own post. I'll try to explain so you don't think that I'm just really full of myself that I would compliment myself like that. Well, my computer doesn't want to post anything for me, so my friend was going to post it for me on her computer. I already had an account, you see, I just couldn't post anything. We got the story up under my name, and then my friend decided to review it for me. But, SHE WAS STILL UNDER MY NAME. After she clicked 'submit review', I said, "you're still under my account, aren't you?" We had a good long laugh about what people would think when they saw that I had reviewed my own story. But, to top it all off, she had also tried to put my story on her favorites list, but guess what? That's right, she put it on MY favorites list. So apparently my foavorite author is myself and my fave story is the White Mirror.

And you thought my FIC was confusing?

Virginia... why did you review to your own story? Anyway, I think you were looking for Sebastian, *enLIGHTenment* , and they guy she fell in love with is Eric. Just thought I'd let you know, ;-) I like this story. A little confusing at times, but good. I still don't understand why you replied to your own story...