:( Poor Gir... Great story, really well written, but poor, poor Gir...

I literally started crying and it takes allot to make me cry. Good job.

Every time it says "he doesnt look my way. not once." It breaks my heart a little. i ADORE zagir, and the one-sidedness it has is something absolutely new to me. its perfect. this is one of the few stories i kick myself for not writing. you, sir, are a genius.

Wow. You managed to catch GIR's creepy side phenomenally well. And, for me, this work gives off the vibe that while all this goes through his head, that little robot is still just sitting there with the blue eyes and vacant smile, which just adds to the awesomecreepy.

Great job!

Awwwww... Poor GIR! I always knwe he loved Zim and just acted like that to get his attention.

awhhhhhhhhhhh poor GIRRR! T_T

that was reeealy sad...I WUVED IT!3

Aw! This was the first Gir x Zim story I've ever read and it's so cute! I could help Gir. It'll all be o-tay. :')

I'm not a fan on any pairings in Invader Zim
-yet ;D-
BUTBUTBUT that was so well written and so sad on Gir's behalf.
Da-awwsh!
I just wanna hug him and be like 'I LOVEDED YOU!'
awh D:
silly Zim. LOOK AT HIM! :)

again, wonderful story! I could never write something like that. I love the use of poetry.

:'( *huggles Gir* I'll give you the attention.

Wow.

I've never read a Gir x Zim thing before, but this was very enthralling. I very much enjoyed it. It made my heart twitch when Gir wanted to be /observed/, very powerful right there.

I loved it. Absolutely adored it.

You write very well.

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Poor GIR. Isn't his piggy enough ? :P

Aw... Poor Gir... :(

I like the simple, poetry-verse feel of this story. The repetition suits Gir's circling thoughts, always spiralling around his desire for Zim's attention. It's sinister, in a delightful way to read.

Just one technical correction. With parenthesis, they come after periods (like what you did with the comma instance). So the two times you wrote:

Master calls it ‘luv’. & Looking at ME with understanding and concern; with desire and ‘luv’.

(should be): Master calls it 'luv.' & Looking at ME with understanding and concern; with desire and ‘luv.'

The parenthesis comes after commas and periods, but before exclamation and question marks. It's as if the exclamation and question marks are too 'tall,' and so the parenthesis can't climb over them. That's how I like to think of it, anyways. :)

Great story, a simple and powerful look into an abandoned robot's mind.

awe poor Gir I love it ;D