Help
Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search
Reviews for: Growing Pains
SolaCatella
2006-04-01 . chapter 1
Uh, just glanced at the first chapter and noticed something--this sentence needs some revamping, grammatically.

"They’re killing my already none existent social life, in addition to, any study time I might be able to get."

'Nonexistant' is one word and the commas around 'in addition to' need to go. The phrase isn't an aside or an appositive; it's a conjunction of sorts and doesn't need commas to set it off.
SolaCatella
2006-03-31 . chapter 8
Oh, nice! I love your characterization and your interplay. Looking forward to more out of this fic!
Riverfox237
2006-03-04 . chapter 8
Thanks for updating a new chapter for me, Ytak! ^^ I got your PM last night. *hugs back* And I do plan on returning to the site, like when I go to college or something (wow, now THERE'S a scary thought) and my parents don't care as much anymore, but that's still a couple years away, so I won't be around for a long time. And thanks so much for not wanting to leave me w/ a cliffhanger. ^^ You're very welcome for the reviews; I was always happy to give them. Now, onto my final review! (Unless you post another chapter by tomorrow, but I don't really expect you to or anything, of course. No need for so much pressure.)

Great chapter! Lol, I sometimes really wonder what Valerie's reaction would be if she knew that the boy she has a big crush on is her 'arch-nemesis'. And poor Sam is suffering through it all. Too bad for Bookworm that she's so clumsy, but at least she has SOME arsenal! And that was very clever of Danny, how he diverted his Mom's attention from his being late. XD Great job, Ytak! I hope you continue writing this fic, and others! Keep up da great work!
Riverfox237
2006-02-23 . chapter 7
*looks guilty* I know, I know! I said I was gonna review yesterday, but I forgot! Real sorry about that. Anyways! Oo, cool, Bookworm hs returned! Lol, I like her; she's kind of funny, and I'm a bit of a bookworm myself, lol. ^^ Oo, cliffy! Can't wait to see what happens when Danny tries to save Valerie! Please update again soon, and keep up da great work! :D
Riverfox237
2006-02-15 . chapter 6
I take it this came from my pointing out that Tucker was an only child at one point? ^^ Lol. Cute!
Ah, feedback. Well, I have to say that I'd like a little more action. Maybe even a few chapters that link together into a mini-plot for some adventure; after all, Danny does all sorts of strange stuff! The writing style is good, so really, that's my only suggestion: more action, to livin it up a little. Hope that helps! ^^
Riverfox237
2006-02-15 . chapter 5
*gasps* Oh, crapcrapcrapcrapcrap! I forgot to review these! I am SO SORRY! And after you gave me such a nice mention at the top...*wallows in guilt* Okay, I'm here now! On to the REALLY late review! *sweatdrops*
*snicker* Tucker so deserved that jab by Sam. Seriously, it's none of his business!
Good chap, Ytak! ^^ Lol, YES, Dash gets humiliated! ya gotta love that, lol! And I love the hilarious Power Rangers reference Danny made. Ya'd think he'd have grown out of that show by now. Again, good job! Keep up da good work!

*Riverfox sends Ytak a large bag of Insta-Flavor chips as a sincere apology for being so horribly late* (And yes, I AM horribly late, in my opinion; when the story already has a new chapter posted and I haven't been able to review the previous one, I'm way behind! So, uh...yeah. Real sorry about that, once again. ^^)
Riverfox237
2006-02-07 . chapter 4
*snorts* LOL! I love the 'brains' bit at the bottom! XD Aw, it's a cutesy chapter, w/ the little baby! ^^ Nice chapter, Ytak! Again, sorry I'm so late, but I won't bore you w/ yet another explanaition. ^^; Again, good job! Lol, can't wait to see what happens while Danny's on his date! Lol! Hope you can update again soon; keep up da great work!
Riverfox237
2006-02-01 . chapter 3
Before I start, I'd just like to say that I am EXCRUCIATINGLY sorry that I'm so horribly late! I have this huge backed-up clog of chapter updates in my inbox right now, because of it being busy at my house the last few days, and I'm trying to work my way through all of them and get more organized. Anyways, here we go!
0.o LOL! Someone actually wants to date Ghost Writer? Oh, haha, guess I shouldn't be surprised that a 'Bookworm' would have a crush on an author, lol! Oo, man, for a bookworm (often a term for a smart person who reads a lot), she's not showing a whole lot of intelligence. *snicker* Serves her right!
Ah, you just gotta love the mutant hotdogs. XD
Tucker has a baby sister? Why was I not informed? Or is that just something you added into the story?
Good chapter, Ytak! ^^ There certainly are several unexpected twists from what I originally thought this would be like! (I figured the whole thing would be about his date w/ Valerie.) Yeah, I think it'd be cool to change the story title to something like that, though I have to say, it sounds just a little bit too much like 'The Life and Times of Juniper Lee'. Was that what you were going for, or is it just a coincidence? Erg, I'm getting off track again; lol, sorry about that! ^^; Again, great job! Can't wait to read what happens next! Hope you can update again soon; keep up da great work! And I'll definitely check that pic out! :D

*Riverfox237 sends Ytak a batch of her special chocolate-chip cookies as congrats on a good chapter, plus a gallon of Insta-Flavor ice-cream as an apology for being uber-late reviewing*
Riverfox237
2006-01-23 . chapter 2
My, my, THIS is a strange turn of events! I wonder who the mystery ghost who took the thermos could be? *snickers* That is so Jack, lol! Great chapter Ytak! I look forward to the next chapter on Friday! Keep up da good work! ^^
Riverfox237
2006-01-14 . chapter 1
*cracks up laughing* Man, Tucker nailed it right on the head there! "I've heard they can have whole conversations without saying a word." Oh, if he only knew how right he was right then, lol!

LOL! I loved the part where he spat out his drink when he realized what he'd just done! Though I suppose he could have just been thinking of it like he was going to the movies with a friend. Lol, I guess he wasn't thinking too clearly right then. *snicker* Man, he's in trouble now!

*grins* I love how Tucker's always taking pictures of stuff. It's a riot!

Poor Sam. I don't see why it's all a big deal, myself. I don't personally believe that it really makes sense to have a boyfriend when you're 14, anyways. Very rarely do people who started dating in middle school make it last all the way through high school and get married. Some people do, I suppose; I'm not saying it's an absolute. Oh crud, I'm ranting again, aren't I. *sheepish grin* I'll stop now.

Lol, this outta be an interesting fic! I can't wait to read more! And I'm sorry I was late reviewing this; sometimes I get sidetracked and forget to answer the stuff in my in-box. And ironically, I haven't been able to see last night's new ep because one of my parents stopped the recording halfway through! *grumbles* Oh well, I suppose it was my own fault for not setting it to record at a more conveinient time.

Anyways, I look forward to reading the next chap on Thursday! Until then, keep up da awesome work! ^^

*Riverfox237 sends Ytak a large box of popcorn shrimp as a Cool New Story gift* ^^
Galateagirl
2006-01-13 . chapter 1
Increase the DS please. We get enough DV from Butch.
Return to Top