Great chapter, Keitaro will get the Hina blade; That will be exciting. Good Job! I'm eager to read the next chapter.

Yeah another chapter! Kepp 'em coming! But do try and make them just a little longer. Not that the story is bad or anything, IT'S REALLY GOOD. I'd just like to read a little longer before the chapter ends.

wow... it has been a long time since i've even thought about this story lol. Gotta say that i really didn't expect to see this updated but now that it has been i'm thankful. There just aren't enough shinobu keitaro pairings out there >< anyway keep getting those chapters out please, i do enjoy this story.

No offense but you said you hoped to update soon, It's been more than a year. I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter, though it looks like I'll fall off the seat before I get read the next installment.

PLEASE, revive this story.

Very nice story, I hope you choose to continue it. If your still lookin for beta readers I can help I suppose just email it to me. I'm not so good at grammatical stuff but I can pick out typos and such :)

Oh yeah, just email me your drafts (click Albino Arab for the address) and I'll clean up your stories. I hate to see such a cool story be so completely illegible.

I'll beta for you. Your story is pretty good, but your grammar is f*cking atrocious.

Do you know how to use proper punctuation? The lack of periods makes this story nearly impossible to either follow or enjoy.

Fate...weird...and now you know why.

Nice chapter, as one of those dreaded jailbait-fanboys I can't wait to see what you do with this.

Great fan-service jibe too.

Another very good chapter! a little short but still good never-the-less. Nice fanservice part BTW! I look forward to Chapter 5!

Ha ha ha! Naru as a Yakuza princess. That's perfect! I can only guess what Motoko and the others are going to play! Why no mention of Keitaro's cusin Sara? (Haruka and Seta married, that means Sara is Keitaro's cusin!) keep it up!

Interesting content and usually good choice of words (though Keitaro saying "I am so boned" sounds out of place).

A mistake that you tend to make a lot is not starting sentances, especially speech with capital letters. Not using other puncuation like commas in speech or text is another. A few misused words too, like using excepted when accepted is correct. "Inst" instead of "isn't".

With that said, it could be a good story. I'm assuming a KeiShin which is even my favourite pairing (KeiKanako being second). Using something to check grammar would help it a lot.

Very interesting chapter. My guess is that Shinobu meats up with Keitaro 1st and so complicates Kanoko's job.

I like the story so far keep up the good work ^^

This story is a little short for my likeing but I am a Shinobu fan, so... let see what happens.