A very endearing little piece. I liked it, but it seemed like you kind of rushed through the end a tad bit. I don't know how to explain it, but the flow just didn't work towards the middle and end.

(Make sure you make that correction in the third paragraph, at the last sentence with the name switch between Toya and Yuhi. I know someone already commented on that.)

It's very gentle and soft. It basically personifies Toya's somber mood. But if this is the episode I think it is, didn't he tell Aya just moments later that he was only after the angel? Well, maybe it isn't.

All in all, still really good. I hope you take no offense in my comments. Keep up the good work.

*Aya and Toya Forever!*

Very emotional. You make it like I'm right there with you. Two thumbs up!

I like this a lot. Good work. -kit

That was good. He seemed in charcter you did a good job.

I have to say that I like the concept of your piece. The beginning is great. It shows what many of us would like to have more of..Toya's thoughts.

After that you kinda just state the obvious and go a bit ahead of yourself, if you are sticking with the scene and sequence of the anime.

You have great potential, but might want to listen to the type of words that Toya would use. For exampl, I think that instead of "Not today, anyways," he would have said, "At least not today."

Overall I feel that this piece is great with the concept of telling us the things that Toya keeps to himself.

Uhm... I don't read Ayashi no Ceres, so I can't really judge the ff, even if I read it, and I like it... maybe I have to watch AnC yes, probably :D

anyway I would only tell you that your site is down, if ever you didn't notice it. When you click to the link on your profile you arrive to an homestead's page that says your site is down because you haven't updated your personals...

just to let you know in case you didn't noticed _

im a tooya and yuuhi fan, and this storys so sweet, aww... i just love sap hehe

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaw! it's so cute it makes me want to puke

Short an' sweet! I loved it! Now I want to go write an AnC like this... you've inspired me

Imaginative, emotional, all in all pretty good.

"She has to make her own choices, and if she choose Tooya, I have to respect that."

eh..shouldn't it be [if she chooses Yuuhi]?

But I like ya fic...it brings out that hesitation and insecurity inside Tooya...which does exist in him, but not for long! haha _

keep on ritin'!