it's a good start to your story not bad at all.

Not bad! A bit melodramatic in some parts, but overall very readable! I'd like to see where you're going with this.

Note: the melodramatic part I'm referencing: A single tear rolled down her right cheek, leaving a glittery, moist trail.

Other than this sentence, it's very well-written. An easy fix. ^_^

Very nice intro! I always like S3 ficcies with Chris in them lol. Update soon!

Well keep going Chris/Hugo or maybe Chris/Sierra;)

I smell...true rune love maybe?...maybe yes?...maybe no? Hugo/Chris...yes?...no? Please say yes!...or any romance will do...but w/this pairing they'll never die! Hooray!

PS: The chapter really wasn't too serious...It just sounds like Chris could use a vacation...granted a really long vacation. :)

You often transfer between tenses, your narrative style is rather fickle, and you have made several grammatical errors. This story could benefit from an experienced beta-reader, preferrably one who could also re-attune you to the nuances of the characters. (Chris is not a female version of Squall Leonhart, for instance.)