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| Josunurashima 2008-06-04 ch 4,  | abuseHURY AND UPDATE! I WANT TO READ MORE! |
| MotokoUrashima 2008-03-24 ch 4, | abusethe plot is more then a little rough around the edges... you also have quite a few errors as far as proper english speech... as far as the grammatical stuff, I could retype it and send it back to you but... eh... the major issue with the plot would be oh... say... Tsuroko as a novice angel... she's the older sister and can completely whip Motoko's ass, so somehow this doesn't seem to work... don't take that to mean bad things about what you wrote though... I've read stuff including the phrase "...slowly faded from red to gold with the speed of lightning" (which is an oxymoron) I am happy that you threw in Tsuroko as an important character, and I can't say most people do that. |
| Bloodyredshade 2008-03-17 ch 4, | abusenice. action romance what more could you want. |
| demigod009 2007-12-04 ch 4, | abuseDude/ Dudet (just incase your a girl) pls. update this story more, I've been reading this story for awhile looking for new chapters but it's been a while since you uploaded. Anyway Great Work i like the concept and I like your story!! keep up the good work hope to see more chapters soon! ^_^ |
| Mike Kromer 2007-11-15 ch 4, | abuseMan this will definatly be a good story you have here, I'm loving it so far, keep up the good work, This is quite different but different is good, wanting another chapter up soon |
| James 2007-09-21 ch 4, anon. | abuseinteresting concept. update more often! |
| hugoauthen 2007-06-19 ch 4, | abuseI must say you are an awesome writer you have great a number of great ideas and unfinished stories >.< I really like this one though :D |
| RandomReview 2007-05-22 ch 4, anon. | abuseYo, 6th review or something I think =P Anyway, another nice story concept (I want to write some too so stop taking all the cool ones!) =P 'Motoko betrayed her father and heaven for the love of a demon, and she will pay for her betrayal.' I think that should be Tsukuro...o-O Other than that, the story is great^_^ I got lost on some parts, but I was still able to piece together the events so all is good. Keep writing! |
| conlan0414863 2007-01-31 ch 4, | abusekeep on typing |
| GRRR 2007-01-03 ch 4, anon. | abuseStrange but cool story ITS GREAT! |
| AegisX-TAIL- 2006-08-07 ch 4, | abuseNice... when do you update? see you when you do... adios for now... |
| dark heart 2006-07-19 ch 1, anon. | abusewhen are you going to move onto chapter 5 |
| weaponsmaster63 2006-07-17 ch 1, anon. | abuseThis is a realy good fan fic please continue onto the next chapter |
| Reaper 2006-06-19 ch 4, anon. | abusemore...want more, must have more |
| Bobboky 2006-06-17 ch 4, | abusenice, although i think you switched Motoko and Tsuruko's names in the final paragraph. excellent chapter |