i like the way you wrote that.

there's only that thing that it has described stuff only from the book. I hope you come up with smth new soon

I am so happy to be finding more Death Gates fics here! And this is a good one too! You write Haplo very well, and this flowed so great with the feel of the story at that moment. Good job! And please write more!

Cool, but i have one meager complaint to an otherwise great story. I though they jumped out the window, rather than the actual door itself. Anyhoo [what a great word that is], i still like it and i fear i descend into madness again. *sigh*

Hey, a new Death Gate Author! Welcome!

This was pretty well written, though you kind of messed up with the paragraphs (they end in the middle of sentences and there's one that's put in the middle of the page, instead of left to right). But that's maintenance, not too important. It seems to be popular to take scenes directly from the book and expand them. This is good, but I should really reread this part of the book before reviewing... _;

Hope you don't mind? And I hope you'll write more Death Gate fics in the future!