This is a great story I was hooked from the first sentence. I also loved how you connected the beginning to the ending, and it was cool how you also tied in the Sara tattoo.

i like it a lot. many typos but still, the story's GREAT. Ü

Interesting angle. I enjoyed it.

It is a little hard to read in places. If you broke it up into more paragraphs and seperated different people's dialogue it would make it much easier.