that was pretty good, and you got the personalities of the characters almost exactly like in the series .

i dont usually go for hetro stuff. but that was really really good. kinda smutty... but i like that.

Wow..very nicely done! Pretty good for your first lemon :)

Great story. It had a lot more detail than you'd usually find, and I think that is what really makes your work stand out. *nods*

I enjoyed it and I look forward to seeing more from you. I made doubly sure to add you as a favorite author.

Good luck!

hell!

that was so good!

i'm panting like hell right now...i'm flushed and sweaty...man that was so hot!

SECOND CHAPTER PLEASE!

You should make a second chapter to this story! it's very well written! you're quite descriptive..

are you serious about that being your first lemon fic? cause your really good at it lol -

you gotta love Ryoki! *pets him* he's just hopeless at being nice, but he tries! *squeal of lovingness* thanks for this excellent fic!

I loved your story, for the most part the characters were right on spot, like Ryoki's line - "My sheets" xD It made me crack up. Hatsumi was a bit off but if it wasn't the story would suck so good job and keep up the good work!

Lovely, well written, tender and in very in charecter-this was wonderfully done. Bravo!

Good job, its okay if you felt tense while writing that...anyone would have felt tense!

that was amazing! i hope youll write another ryokixhatsumi fic.. youre a great writer )

wow, that's good. totally orgasmic. thanks for posting! - i loved it!

That was really good, more please? XD

Go Hatsumi