That is definitely a dark piece of writing you have there. Grostequely descriptive in the imagery and wording department; makes for a very vivid and deep story. Wonderful choice of words and the way you scripted it all together was beautiful. The two single words on the note from Sara was absolutely haunting.

Oh you have such potential here to build on. This may be the impetus for Grissom to break out of his emotional immobility. Inertia will be transformed because the outside force will overcome static friction. But will the movement be subject to sliding or rolling friction? Alas, friction can be a wonderous thing!

In case you are wondering, I am a scientist, and love to teach, currently in afterschool hands on science sessions - Science Adventures!

Wow, great fic and seriously poor Grissom. ;-;

Horribly tragic! Wow! Thank god you wrote it as a dream, or I would HATE this fic! Since it's a dream, though, I can envision Griss waking up and making up with Sara to prevent such a horrible outcome. (Says the eternal GSR optimist!)

Great job!

Great written. I liked it very much. Horrible nightmare...

Bye bye

-carrie-