Oh! Interesting story!! I have no idea what's onna happen next. Soo...please update soon!

Oh, gawd, you've caught me on this story. It's gorgeous and disturbing at the same time, and I have to say, I see the Nazi theme as well.

This is awesome. I hope you update soon!

Katako-Chan

Nice story, but what does Fuyubi mean? Sorry, I'm a bit useless in Japanese. But seriously, reading about people who are dead, and then the reactions of their firends left behind, it's kind of...well, I'm not sure exactly, but it's something like a good mix between sad and disturbing, if that makes sense.

Well anyways, good story so far. It kind of reminds me of a certain book, but I'm not sure which. But that's really cool!!

But, please, UPDATE SOON!!

Hold on. Incinerators? People desperate for work? Death Sqauds? Factories? I see a nazi theme! And I bet those machines are automated guards!

Whoa.

Hook line and sinker. I'm onboard!

I'm hooked... please update soon!!

This is really good. Like the swich between past and present tense. Don't know if your still planing on updating this but I've enjoyed what I've read so far.

OOh, a mission...

well done, too. It's really realistic--I could definitely see this being a canon mission. (If canon wasn't so focused on Sasuke and filler eps...)

I like the "after and before" time changes of the mission, too. And the emotion--everyone seems like a real person, with feelings.

I'm really enjoying it.

Gwah. I loved it, the comparison between Sakura and Tenten. I feel bad for the factory workers. I loved this chapter. You keep me in suspense. xD

Kodoku.

wow.. that left me mystified.. what happened to tenten, shika and chouji?? update soon!

Wow! I was so confused at first but then, after reading the rest of the chapters, it is all clear to me now. I CAN SEE THE LIGHT AT THE END OF THE TUNNEL!

This is so interesting. I'm trying to figure out why when it's Neji, Lee and Sakura your tense changes to present tense and when it's Shikamaru, Tenten and Chouji it's past tense and I probably just said the reason in my question.

Neji, Lee and Sakura are in the same area as Shikamaru, Tenten and Chouji but only after their mission. So I'm assuming that when you tell the story of Shikamaru's team it was in the past and when you tell the story of Neji's team, it's occuring in the present. Which logically would explain my question. So that was pointless of me to ask but if it can be wrong, right?

This is great. I love reading stories like this one.

Curiouser and curiouser... XD Poor Chouji.

And poor Neji. It's cute how the line's blurring for him.

And go Sakura! Use that goukakyuu! XD

/Sakura and Lee are anxious as he scours the expanse of the building until finally, his eyes settle on a small doorway up a flight of metal stairs. From here, close to 80 meters away, he can make out the word ‘Office’.

She ran a finger over the blue badge on the overalls before Shikamaru took it away. Almost immediately, he started to rip some of the lining out. She wanted to ask what he was planning but Chouji returned a grim look on his face./

I'd recommend some physical transition here, because otherwise I still think it's Sakura so when Shikamaru's mentioned I got confused.

Oh my goodness. This is so good. All you stories seem to be my favorites. Exceptional work, everything is so well planned and refined. Great job.