cool i like it

I cannot stress enough how much I like this story!

I really, really, like John's character. Love his sarcastic side! I also ADORE how you made Vince's job part of the mob.

Great work! I look forward to more!

Good job! It's great! Well written, made me laugh. Can't wait for the next chapter.

-Elephant.

I really like the way this is written. Like I said before, I usually can never read things with original characters, but this has my attention.

Just a few suggestions ...

- Re-read your work. Earlier you mentioned John's ex was Jennifer and then you called her Sarah.

- Format. I think the format for the first chapter was MUCH easier to read through.

But I really think this is a good story you got going so keep at it! :)

A well set up story, I've really enjoyed reading it so far, and can't wait to see where it goes. Nice work. :)

Excellent! Sounds a lot like "Dead Like Me." I usually don't read things with new characters, but this has my interest! Look forward to reading more.

This is wonderful, great characters, an embarrassingly memorable death, and what looks like the beginnings of some interesting developments. I'm looking forward to seeing more of this.