This is very intresting, is there anymore?

A truly interesting concept, and I have several comments:

- You mention that Seika was fighting a Coeurl, but as far as I know, they do not exist on Kilika Island?

- I agree with Auron's Ghost when it comes to the pace of the story; it seems a bit rushed sometimes, especially at important parts of the story - for instance:

* when Seika is told about his handicape

* when he has to decide if he wants to become a Fayth of the Final Aeon

* when he has to decide if he want to become Ifrit

Personally, I thought the scene where Yunalesca makes him a Fayth was very rushed. I would love to read more in detail how she turned him into a Fayth, more thoughts and feelings of Seika - and why wouldn't he let Yara know and say goodbye to her? If there were one particular reason why he wouldn't, maybe it would be a good idea to let the readers know.

- I thought it quite brave to add a sexual scene, although I must admit I thought some parts of it were a bit clichè (but I don't doubt writing a love scene is difficult!).

- I loved the part about Snow Flan rolls! Great idea! And also the creation of the Sphere Break game! :-D (But Ronsos are strong with high endurance, not fast and agile - as Birah was).

Otherwise, I thought the story was a bit fastly paced. I missed some more elaboration concerning the characters thoughts and feelings. (Was it a coincidence, or did Seika's personality remind me of Tidus?). I also noticed some mistakes regarding comma and wording, but not more than what most people have.

Still, I love what you're doing with the FF-X stories, creating more or less the entire history of Spira! I would love to add my thoughts and stories to this world, and to the timeline you're working on. And I definitly find your stories and plots very creative and interesting.

Keep the good work up! I hope you don't find this review too negative or harsh, that is not my intention. (And feel free to criticise my story just as much!).

Nice. It's a bit faced paced at times, but nice.

Good Work