What can I say that I haven't already? Your work is divine. Please oh please continue writing forever and ever.

I hope you haven't forgotten about this story. It's one of the best Rex and Weevil fics I've ever seen... and it's only got two out of nine chapters up! ;__; It's been over two years! I know you've probably got a lot on your plate, but when you get the chance...

Ah, the everyday troubles of the modern failed nerd. Simply brilliant.
I know that this story will probably never be finished, but what you've written so far is great nonetheless. Many would state that it would be difficult to write about two less popular Yugioh minor characters, but you seem to have had no problem.
Oh, and although 'alright' should be 'all right', it shouldn't really matter, as they'd probably pronounce it as 'alright' anyway.

Hm... Toby sure is a strange one isn't he...
I'm enjoying this fic, mostly because it's different (In a GOOD way...obviously) I'm not used to reading about these two...guess there aren't many fics about them...well I've not really looked...just kinda stumbled across this one...I like Rex and Weevil, they're a funny pair not my FAVOURITE characters, I just like them because they are funny...my favourite characters are usually people with a strange/sad/mysterious past, like Marik, Ryo and Noah, I guess that is why I like this fic so much as both Rex and Weevil have reasonably sad pasts...Anyway PLEASE continue!
And that is enough from me, I don't even know is you'll read this! You could suddenly look at your email inbox in 10 years time and say 'Oh I forgot I had a fanfiction profile!'
Ja ne!
...Silenced Shadows

This is my favrioute yugioh story using two characters i dont generally like and no crack pairings. You have real talent :) This is really awsome!

The story is simply fabulous.

Wow LittleKuriboh...wow O.O That was so AWSM! I don't know, when I read this I looked back on the first time I got tested to get glasses & thought how scary it was for me too cuz I was little! And I felt sorry for Rex when he got in trouble with the principal. Yay! Rebecca's comin! And the character's of Toby, Mr.Alistair & Nina are not necessarily Yu-Gi-Oh! characters but they're SO well developed 1s!! I love this fanfic! I like how you also use lines from the show such as "can't duel yourself out of a paper bag" & "that's crazy talk" What a stroke of genius!I give it 5 stars! *Gives LittleKuriboh a standing ovation.
P.S. Thanks for making me appreciate Rex & weevil more ^-^ I respect them wholeheartedly now. Also I like the lines:
"Sarcasm the lowest form of wit"
"weevil...the lowest form of nerd!"
I fell off my chair w/ laffter! XD

O!! This is one of the best Weevil and Rex Raptor stories I've ever read! ^_^ What an amazing plot! *wiggles thumbs*

I believe it was Mr. Burns who said it best; Excellent.

This story is very, very intriguing. I’ve only read the first chapter so far, but I can’t wait until I have the time to read the next one.

I printed out the first chapter so I could read while I was on a car-trip. I scribbled my thoughts in the margins of the page while I was reading it, so my thoughts were fresh and it wasn’t “I read this story three days ago and I’m struggling to remember my first impressions…”

I was surprised when I started reading the very first paragraph, it really set a good impression on me for the rest of the story. Awesome style, I wanted to keep reading to find out exactly who this boy was. Though, it took a little too long for my attention span, so I ended up cheating and reading ahead a bit to find out it was Weevil.

After the flashback, though, I was glued. Utterly and completely. The whole scene with Weevil and Rex at the cinema was a riot. Even though I never saw King Kong, I was able to recognize that was the movie they were talking about from the way they described it. Though, I had a couple of questions (maybe they’re answered in the next chapter?). From the mention of teacups in the flashback and of Disneyland Paris with the cinema worker, does the story take place in England? And are Rex and Weevil both English? It’s what the text seems to subtly suggest, not that it really seems to matter that much, but it’s just…interesting.

I just loved the way you gave both of these otherwise very two-dimensional characters a past and made them, well, believable and likable in a sort of odd way. They’re so much more interesting than 4-Kids—or even Mr. Takahashi—ever made them. It’s just so cool. I never thought I’d be able to say that I read a fanfic primarily about Rex and Weevil—and enjoyed it!

It’s very good. I personally felt that the beginning with kid-Weevil was a little slow, but towards the end of that scene and onward, the pace picked up and the momentum kept going. Thank you for sharing this cool story. :D

The first thing I must say is…wow. What a captivating story! You have turned two (in my opinion) soulless characters into people with whom one can sympathize. That, and that alone, is extremely commendable. In addition, your writing style is extremely captivating, yet easy to follow.

Now, I must be the base little person I truly am, and tell you all the things I saw wrong with it at once. o.O; I think an editor has eaten my soul and taken its place in my absence.

So, anyway…when the staff member looks at Rex and Weevil, there is a sentence fragment attached to the sentence with a semi-colon that I found awkward: “The worst kind of customer there was; one who would jump at the chance to cause a fuss, even if there was clearly no rationality whatsoever behind their demands, and enjoy every stinking minute of it.” It threw me off mid-stream, just when I was really getting into the narrative.

When Weevil decides he no longer wants to be friends with Rex, and he says, “I see, alright!” “alright” should be “all right,” shouldn’t it? I know it’s a very little detail, but it always bothers me when somebody says “alright,” because it isn’t standard English.


When Weevil says, “I see that the only way I can seek to claim the title of number one ranked duelist… is by casting you to the wayside!” I think the common phrase is “by the wayside,” not “to the wayside.” However, I don’t think it is used correctly (or maybe just kindly) there. Throwing someone out of one’s considerations is a very harsh way to go about solving one’s problems.

Then, when Weevil says, “I can reach heights your kind could never hope to, and while I stay here tending to your childish pleas for appreciation you’re just dragging me down with you. Well, not anymore!” I think there should be a comma between “appreciation” and “you’re.” As it is, you have an independent clause preceding a dependent clause without a comma in between.

“Weevil was convinced that he was the source of his dueling woes, and until he learned otherwise he wasn’t going to listen to a thing Rex had to say.” There should be a comma between “otherwise” and “he.”

“Rex tried not to let on, but he really hated the guy’s guts – big time.” This part is very awkward to read. D=

“You’re nothing but a child, Raptor. A teensy weensy pupa, utterly defenceless against those with eyesight sharp enough to spot your inherent weaknesses.” You spelled “defenseless” wrong.

“Listen! For the last time!” Weevil jumped to his feet and raised his fists into the air, spittle spraying from his quivering lips. “I don’t like Rex Raptor!” Hahahaha…I really liked that part.

I think I should end this review on that positive note, as I will probably be facing imminent death through the internet if I say any more. Please take my constructive criticism kindly!

Wow.

I feel like this deserves a really long, really in depth review, and after reading it I'm not sure if I'm capable of writing the kind of response it ought to have. I'm surprised that more people haven't read it, it's spectacular. There are a few problems here and there, but I'll start with what I liked.

The writing style was very sophisticated, as was the pacing. You switched in and out of vastly different scenes in a deft and natural way, which was impressive. I think I liked the first scene best, it was written so well, and Weevil was thinking just the way a child would--I thought like that when I was little sometimes, it rang a lot of bells. The whole chapter was beautiful, and I'm really curious as to what's going to happen next! You managed to fit a plot point in at the end of a lot of explanation and character development, which is tough. So all in all this was a really great story, and I loved it.

Now for where you had some trouble. I hate to say it, but the dialogue wasn't really believable. A lot of it was too melodramatic, and too well-spoken for the characters in question. They were most in character during the scene in the movie theaters...later on I wasn't really sure who I was reading about. It was great character interaction, and I could definitely see them feeling that way, but not expressing it so readily. The abrupt switches from vulgar to eloquent were off-putting. Also, you used alliteration quite a bit, which is fine outside of dialogue, but not inside. People just don't talk like that. What Rex said to his stepdad as age nine was also not believable...if a child is able to sense something like that, they wouldn't be able to articulate that. Also, what's weird about a nine-year-old playing with toys? That seems perfectly normal!

Please don't take offense to my concrit, I only want to help, and it was so good I felt like I needed to go through it with a fine-toothed comb--you clearly put a lot of effort into writing it, so I should put the same effort into my response. All in all I adored the first chapter, and I'm favoriting it. I'll read the next one as soon as I find the time, but I have to go to class now! Goodbye and thanks for the amazing read!

Ah, I was just lucky enough to find this story and one about these two in such a well-written prose is great. I'm not sure if you'll even continue this, but I love what I see so far. You've really captured these two, with their actions and comments and I think you actually made me like them more! Only thing is that it felt that there would be an overabundance of detail, such as in the beginning. But really, this is such great and quality writing! Despite this being basically a year old, I'm really glad I came across this. I'll be sure to read your other story on here~

Wow, this has got to be one of the best stories I've ever read. granted, it's been almost a year since you posted it, but whatever :P

Anyway, I hope you update soon! I MUST know how this ends!

this is an intersting start to a story, i do hope that you continue soonish ^_^ i would continue reading, plus i dont think there are enough fics about them