No flow. Bad grammar. Many a typo.

Did you read over it after you finished typing? Sure, you probably won't ever reply to this (since the story is six years old and you most likely don't care anymore), but I, along with many others, are picky with what I/they read.

Don't ever mix up the words 'since' and 'sense'.

My attempt at constructive criticism.

SaLEm

Hello there angle from my nightmare :D

nice

O.o I meant that in a good way.

duh, sasuke. gaara IS the phycotic [younger] brother.

gahh...needs an update...hope ur wrist feels better...i broke mine before too so i kno how u feel...its a pain...*sigh*

update when u can...

i really CAN NOT tell you how much i'm loving this!

SO I'M NOT EVEN GOING TO SAY IT ANY MORE, JUST KNOW I LOVE it!:)

loving this so much already!

your a way cool writer!

thanx again for sharing your story!

oh my god!

that is already way cool! :)

thanx!

lol

Hn.

The words of a true wall.

LOL everyone is so confusing. BUT THATS GOOD! Hee-hee.

Everyone wants a piece of Naruto.

THAT BECAUSE HE'S SO HOT!

ARGH WHAT I'D DO TO BE A GUY!

nice fic:-)

I hope the sequel is out and hopefully complete

... this is so interesting! I can't wait to see (erm... read... whatever!) what happens next! By the way your writing style is awsome (in case you're wondering what I mean by that; I mean that I really like how you describe things). Hey! Do you think you can tell me how to write my own FanFic? (I know I'm pathetic, please don't give me a hard time)