the beginning was cute...

but then you kind of went downhill.. a lot.

1) jack couldnt have tied wood and a chair together, he couldnt even get anything so that he could live too, much less adding a six year old girl to that.

2) "Cora I'm sorry, but your daddy is in heaven."

"Ok, daddy's in heaven. I want to go play!"

Most ridiculous thing I've ever seen. People dont react like that to that type of news. My dad died when I was 15, and I wasnt thinking "Hmm... I WANNA GO HANG WITH FRIENDS!"

3) And a little girl wouldnt try and replace her parents:

"Well will you be my new mommy and daddy?"

Maybe you just worded it wrong, but she might 'live with them' and they would take care of her, but its impossible to replace someone so close to you.

Good, i just wanted to say Cora seems a little to happy that her dad's in heaven. Other than that its really good.

Aw.That was cute.

this was really bad, sorry. BAD

That was a really good story i wish that was on the real movie

I liked reading this, and just so you know, there was a deleted scene ; Cora and her father being trapped in the steerage section and drowning. It's quite depressing...

This fanfiction wasn't great at all. Why would there be a hole in the wall, the ship is brand new!

Um...Sorry to say but Anabelle and Fredrick are right. I'm not swear I'm just going to say they're right about Cora being jealous of Rose and ya, if you put them under the same roof, it'd be a madhouse, so...ya. And Anabelle and Fredick, don't be so hard on her, ya it's bad but ya don't have to cus.

No offence, but this wouldnt happen. Cora would not be all playful when she found out that her daddy died. She mostly likely would have plopped down and cried. And another thing, she was so fucking jealous of rose because she got to be with jack and she didn't. Cora was just too young. jack was 18, do you really think that if he had lived that he would put rose and cora together in the same house? common, be realistic here, please. thanx.

i'm sorry to have to tell you that ur story did not work out the way you planned...

annabelle dumbledore

I have just finished reading your story. And I must say, I have to agree with 'The-Canadian-Sith'. First off, Cora compleatly envied Rose in the movie. So she wouldn't be all sweet and nice to Rose like you made it. And don't give me shit saying, "It's fanfic, I can make it however I want!" When the only part you re-did was the sinking at the end. Not the party in third class after the dinner, or ANYTHING else. Just that. So don't even try me prissy-bitch. Also, what the fuck were you on when you had cora want to play after jack said, "your daddy's in heven." Seriously what the fuck? No one would have that reaction. She was sad, scared and freaking out when she 'thought' he was dead. At the bottom of this box it says, "it is extreamly helpful to use this opportunity to comment on an aspect of the story that can be improved." And my advise, is take it down and re-do the entire thing. The title is even mis-leading, whenever someone comes across the word 'fate' it mean tragic, or death in that matter. So, she should have died. She was cute, I will say that. But she was also a jelous little bitch of a girl. She wasn't happy for Jack being with Rose. She was jelous as all fuck. And again, don't give me shit saying, "She's a little girl who has a crush on a young, handsome artist."

With all do respect

Frederick73006

You made it to short and choppy. You compleatly mutilated the end of the real Titanic Movie. It should have just been Rose and Jack that lived, and they should have had there own child, not cora. Cora should have gone with her own mother and father. Another thing, realisticly you cut out WAY to much, and rushed it. And Jack would not be able to tie the floatation devices together, he himself said, "It's like a thousand knifes stabbing you all over your body... You can't breath, can't think, at least not about anything except the pain." So there is no way that he would be able to do that. Also, Cora would not have said "lets go and play" after Jack told her her father had died. And Rose and Cora didn't even know each other, so why the hell would they act like each other around each other? Over all, this story compleatly sucked.

uh... i kinda thought this would be tragic...

I thought I reviewed this already! Bad me...

Aw, Cora was so cute here! It was nice and simple, just like how a little girl would think. Good job!

Purple Rhapsody

YAY CORA AND JACK LIVE!

Thanks for reviewing mine and TheEvilTrafficCone's story! We already put up chapter two!

Every time I watch Titanic I wonder what happened to Cora but now she lives and I'm happy! Hooray! I read your bio and your darn right! I cry every time I watch Titanic when Jack dies and I think Leo DeCaprio was REALLY, REALLY HOT in that movie!

Peace out!

-16aqua

This was a very cute story. It had a good and happy ending that i wished the movie had, but oh well, i still luv it and your writing is so awesome.