Really good! ^_^

Haha! Wow! I did not see that coming! I was so suprised at how everything turned out and how Satsuki supposedly died. Then I realized that it was all an act for a movie. I understand this because I to watched the creepy alien panties episode. I laughed so hard at the end. I hope you continue on with your writing! You're doing a fabulous job of it. Until next time!

I had to bite my tounge to keep from laughing like a moron! That was damn funny!! AND CUT! Ha, pure genius! Oh, and which episode was the alien one? That description alone was
hi-lare-ee-us! She sounded like she was a regular 'cereal' killer! I keep all of my promises... She sounded as if she did that on a regular basis! Too funny... XD
I will now try to make funny pix on here..


AW! I can't cut and paste on paint! Oh, well. You should work on your punctuation and spelling. A spelling example:

Mushi-Mushi means 'Hi-Hi'
Moshi-moshi is not a word. I am studying Japanese. I am, however, rather young. Don't ask why I typre stuff, because I just type or say anything that comes to mind. My poor teachers...
Don't get me wrong, I have the best grades in my class! I'm not an idiot; otherwise, I probably wouldn't be reading this...
Read my stories, too!! I have a written story that I have yet to type that is 50 paes long so far. I need to write way more for it t be finito. I will write or type some Ichigo 100% fics, but the other is about Sasuke and Temari of Naruto. I like the Sasuki

I thought it had some kind of a "Harry Potter" story telling theme to me. And the ending was obvious because that happened in the manga as well. Other than that it was okay.

nice!

Hmm... was wondering where you were going with that. Kitaooji seemed a little OOC, but if people stick to the end... it'll make some sense... I guess

Overall... not bad. Not sure I like how it ended like that, but story wise it was good.

I am distraught.

dude yui is his childhood freind not his cousin at least that is how it was in the anime

here are the comments ill say...
1) neither toujou nor junpei are IC (in character). and those two should have
2) for someone who watched special AMV (alien panties...) the plot is easily guessed at about chapter 4 or 5 (besides in the AMV the only person who shouldnt be concious of whats happening is the person watching, all of the characters were)
3) use apostrophes for the thoughts 'i hope she'll at least read what im writing'
4) the first part,beggining or ending, should have been in the same fic as a prologue and not a seperate fic

sorry if i seem like im flaming but besides all that its ok

ah..not to be a total critique but...the only things dat bothered me were the way everyone called manaka...notice how everyone calls him differently >__> but i guess u might have fergotten bout dat... and another thing dat bothered me [and probably distracted me from other stuff] was dat...Toujou...would never agree to karaoke.. X__X she hates it

o well..other den dat im juz happy dat im not the only Toujou fan..and whoa o.O" Satsuki freaked the crap out of me, go u~!

What can I say...Good ending of a good story.

Satsuki was only a bit OOC in this story.Yes I mean only a bit.In the manga she was REALLY keen on making Manaka her boyfriend too.In the last chapter we don't see a only a deperate plotting girl(from the pas chapters) there is a girl that will do anything for love.

The characters were well described , the narrating part was ok and the plot was interesting.

I think you should consider writting a sequel.

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.

What is wrong with Satsuki?
Selling two of her friends just like that?

When I think about Satsuki in manga and in this story it's obvious that Satsuki is OOC and the story is getting dramatic and somewhat dark.I understand it's a fanfiction but I hope Satsuki will realize what she had done.

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.

Now who would have thought that Satsuki will be so deperate that she'd think about the kidnapping.
Heh that's fanfiction ofcourse hehe.
Two thumbs up-good chapter.
Update soon.

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.

Well what can I say..Manaka does it again.

Udate soon.
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.

Heh Satsuki is really showing some claws ;]
Great chapter.

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.