Oh! I love this! It is so good!

Hi, there! I'm Lily, the Judge Coordinator at the Orion Awards, where I hope you realise this has been nominated for Best Songfic. :) Congratulations on your nomination!

I really like your fic - it's got a lovely mood, and the specifics without going into the actual overall plot are just wonderfully unique. I did wish that there was more story in proportion to the lyrics. If you don't have more story to insert between the lyrics, you can always try removing the repeated lines. Too many lyrics in proportion to the story just makes the reader's eye skip over the lyrics, I'm afraid, and thus I didn't even realise I knew the song until I was rereading. ::shrug::

I love the way you've left it open ended, but I'd definitely also be in favour of fleshing it out instead (or as well) as removing some lyrics. Put in some more of those lovely details early on to connect with the character - whoever she is - because overall there wasn't enough to make a strong connection. You wouldn't have to give us facts that would make her a particular person, just... a bit more of the sort of thing you've already got.

I picked up a couple of minor grammar/typo errors which you can easily fix up for a couple of extra points. ;)
"I just want to here his voice again" - hear
"I love you Artemis." - always prefix the character name in a direct address with a comma, so it should be "I love you, Artemis."
You also seem a little too fond for my tastes of the comma splice, a very common grammatical error, which is joining two sentences together with a comma instead of a semicolon. :)

In summary, it's a lovely fic! Nice and fluffy, completely barebones in the angst and generic plot department, which makes me a big fan, but still providing all the details that make it so much more realistic than merely telling us what actually happened.

Well done, and good luck!

Is this an OC or a charecter in the books? Or not anyone in paticular?
I liked it, origanal, great story.

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it's a cute bit of fluffy love, lol. i like it. i think you captured him pretty well, at least from the eyes of someone so facinated. it's great, good job

Darn! Can't...figure...out...who...GAH!
Good work though! I like how you work with the little details. Most romance stories concentrate on the kiss...the aungish...ect...You talk about chess, and forgetting birthdays. It makes it real.
Kudos,
Kili

Well, it's interesting. A few critique thingies:

Most oneshots with ArtemisOC are done in a more abstract fashion, but you've made it more real with examples - beating him in chess, forgetting his birthday present, etc. And then it's not unrequited - it ends with a kiss. It seems to me that you're trying to develop a character, a romance, in too short a time to really do it properly. It's sorta stuck between an abstraction and a longer story. I never really connected to the OC as a result, and the story struck me a little awkward. If that makes any sense. I'm not terribly inteligible.

Good work, anywho.