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Sprite3
2008-08-28 . chapter 1
Oh wow can you imagine, I am reviewing a story posted more than 7 years ago :) I hope my comments will reach you in a way!

When Ricardo was first shown in the TV series, it took me some time to warm up to this character, but I am glad now some fans bring him back into their own stories. It's always funny how no one ever believes his stories, and even as a reader I have a hard time believing anything he says.

I think my favorite sentence is ""Ah, sweet romance or sweet adventure," Diego said out loud. "They are one and the same," he mused, smiling." :) This made me smile, felt like Diego all right!

As for constructive criticism, I have a few things to say. First, I felt it took some time for the plot to "kick off", especially because many scenes in the beginning ended without having any cliffhanger feeling to it. It does not matter really for the plot, but as a reader, I didn't feel compelled or curious to read the next part, and so on. I only started to be really intrigued when Ricardo and Diego met with the Capitan and found out the exact same story happened to another man, and only then did curiosity pushed me to read the rest of the story.

I also found a few scenes were a little awkward, as if they didn't fit the story, such as the scene with Diego thinking Bernardo is an intruder in his bedroom.

One other slightly odd thing is how Diego never tried to explained that the bandits forced him to wear Zorro's clothes! If i were about to be hanged for real, I think I would try to yell this out to anyone within earshot :) Also odd there was no trial, especially since no one really knows Zorro's identity. Maybe I am being too logical, but as a representative of the law, I wouldn't be trusting every stranger's claim of capturing Zorro especially with 20 pesos reward, eheh.

Overall, I found this story very, very reminiscent of the Disney episodes, in terms of pacing, plot, and characters. I find it great that Diego did not even have to act like Zorro, for once :) All the elements of an adventure were there, even the beautiful lady in danger! Good going for Ricardo :D
Randi Scott
2008-07-07 . chapter 1
A very enjoyable story. The characters are all true to Walt Disney's Zorro standards.

The story moved along at a good pace. EVERY chapter was excellent and it was difficult to stop reading but I had to do some things.

I hope other Zorro fans read it and enjoy it too.
VHunter07
2007-11-15 . chapter 1
THAT WAS AMAZING! I am a HUGE fan of the show & was just wondering if there happened to be a Zorro section on here. Your story was the first I found & I love it! You wrote Diego perfectly! As well as everybody else. Thank you for sharing your wonderful talents with us! I hope to read more Zorro fics like yours! :)
Gismo
2006-06-15 . chapter 1
This was a brilliant story! I must say that it could have easily been an episode of the show, only much better that is! This one is deffenitely going to be on my favorites list.
I'd love to see more stories from you. I'm sure they will be just as good as this one was.
The Gemini Sage
2003-04-05 . chapter 1
that was WONDERFUL! it was just like watching the series again! this is going on my favorites list. you should make some more, only with deigo being zorro, or his father knowing. oh yeah, and i loved the fact that you put richardo in there. next to zorro/deigo hes my favorite character.
dancingflame543
2002-11-28 . chapter 1
Hey, this story was really good and I enjoyed it very much!The plot was very cleverly constructed! You have a knack for keeping the reader's interest. I look forward to viewing more of your work. Keep up the great job!:)
SilentStep
2002-08-14 . chapter 1
Lovely! In the true style of the old Disney TV show, it kept everyone in character and was wonderfully suspenseful and exciting. Good descriptions made it exceptionally vivid. Write more like this- it was great.
TheLoneIdiot
2002-03-15 . chapter 1
Wow. That is a great story! As someone previously mentioned, it felt like watching an episode! AWESOME! Please, Keep writing!
Duo36103
2002-01-10 . chapter 1
Just one thing, THAT'S THE COOLEST THING I'VE EVER READ!! Keep on writing stories like that.

Duo
Jem
2001-11-11 . chapter 1
I truly enjoyed this story. You don't see a lot of fan fiction written about the great older shows and El Zorro was a hero for all time. I hope you will have time to write more adventures for this masked avenger.
Robin
2001-05-14 . chapter 1
This is great! I especially love the ending, though I admit I was disapointed at first with the title of "Captured," while only Ricardo and a few nobodies being kidnapped... Boy did you surprise me with that turn of eventss. Great story!
*Aeris*
2001-05-13 . chapter 1
This was so cool!
I felt like I was watching an episode of the show.
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