I think that she should recover, and he should kill himself in front of her. Sad, but it will make for a good dilemma D:

God I want a Update

Another great chapter, glad to see that good Keitaro won out. I hope you update when you get the chance! Great job!

Great job, keep up the good work!

update! hahahaha!

By far this is one of the best Dark Keitaro based fics i ever read.

But in my opinion, his thick skull is getting in my nerves.

Honestly, Im like Keitaro, I wont stop until my vengeance is satisfied, but not at this extent. I'd smash Keitaro with the Hina Blade and see how he likes his own thousand fold of pain!

I WILL SHOW HIM THE NEW MEANING OF PAIN!

This inspires me to do a collaboration fic (Only me and Keitaro as the characters) based on yours, I certainly hope you have the permission to make me write a one shot, doing an Anti-Dark Keitaro type. I will hurt him, physically, mentally, emotionally, and 21 more degrees of doing it (I know that 21 Degrees sounds stupid, but I want to smash his stupid face.)

You have to update...
YOU HAVE TO!
I'm stuck wondering wth will happen next!
Will they make up or fight even more...
Will she deny being with him or agree...
Will Keitaro force her to come with him just to break her heart more or what...
PLEASE UPDATE PLEASE!!
lol I'm desperate..
>.

kit's a very interesting story.. i like stories that are pretty realistic. this story is a very emotional one unlike the other stories that end quickly with a happy ending.

i like happy endings but i like it more when the characters go through some hard and serious problems that make me feel sad, and then ends happily.

hay.. such bliss..
i like stories and animes like these which tend to make me cry in the end...

hope you keep up the good work..

120/100.. excellent.. the best
by the way thank you, i always wanted to read stories like this..

Seems like my writing of psychiatriatrist might be wrong, but 4 am I do not give it much concer, I would just like to add a point to my precious comment: THAT lUCKILY IS most likely the LAST CHANCE to give him at least a little bit of humanity...

Compulsive, obssessive, bipolar disorder. No offense but Keitaro is starting to look like some people I know in the hospital... in the danger area of the hospital for mentally deficient people... If you do not make a him a little more human soon, anything but Naru suiciding and him falling into depression forever will be out of context...

this story is great...I can feel the angst n romance going on between Naru and Keitaro...can't wait what happens nxt chapter..

While I really don't like bashing fics, i agree with some of the guys in the reviews, i think that Naru is reaching her limit so i wouldn't be surprised if she makes a suicide attempt adn i think that it would help the plot making Keitaro realize whats the damage thats he is being doing. if i remember correctly the reason for what naru broke with Kei was that she thought that she wasn't good for him, you can also make somehow keitaro realize that (i don't know a diary perhaps or a suicide note)

well, you should move the plot the whole revenge thing is getting old.

My first time reviewing this story, which I should have done so much earlier (sorry, school sucks, yes?). Your plot twists are greatly appreciated; they make up the meat of the story, along with the POVs that come after. The plot twists cultivate the rare glimpses of deep emotions that many people out of touch with or in denial against today. Keep it up, thanks for writing.

YES!! MAY THIS BE THE BEGINING OF KEITAROS MEAN SELF BREAKING DOWN!!

While i have no real problemw tih narubashers, this keitaro is just gone over the limit i draw. No girl deserves that. (unless they were actually mena, which naru wasnt. I can think of a few girls i know of that would deserve it.)

maybe Mutsumi is gong to be the bridge that helps bring Naru and Keitaro back to each other. It seems like her.

UPDATE!

So, when are the girls finally going to be successful? Bashing has it's limits you know and I doubt Keitaro would or in fact could have that much teenage angst in him. I like the story, but it's pushing my taste a bit.
One thing you could explore is K2's past after leaving the inn, see what really made him so bitter. Hate builds up over periods of time.
Secondly, Keitaro's anger against EVERYONE is not logical. I get 4/5 (Naru being a **, Motoko killing his **, Su always experimenting on him and Kitsune ** his brains), but Shinobu? She's been nothing but nice to him, thus giving him no logical ground to hate her.
Thirdly, how much can Naru suffer without turning emo suicidal? You know, cutting the wrists in the hot spring would be a pretty ** interesting plot twist. And that doesn't even rule out a happy ending. Yeah, I'm a positive kind of guy, I know.

Best of luck with the story, I think I will put it under my Favorites. I expect regular updates, dunno about that tho, school's starting.

-P