 Simkey 2009-06-09 . chapter 1Wow, you're really good at capturing this! Again, fabulous job! |
 sarcastic Wolve 2009-01-12 . chapter 1Aah i like it when revan returns wether in male or in female...i really diddn´t like it that it was never cleared if she/he came back. This i like this story... |
 dreamshell 2007-06-23 . chapter 1I must say, this is pretty impressive. I like the dreary feeling that the rainy day brings as well as the mundane mood that you start off with. And the walking cane does a good job of expressing with a visual what kind of things must've gone on for Revan while she was away.
However, I am a little irked about Carth's inability to put two and two together. I suppose he's probably tucked his hope of ever seeing Revan again somewhere out of the way, but one would think he'd start to suspect *something*.
There's another thing I hope you wouldn't mind if I brought up. Maybe it's unfair to ask you specifically, but it's a question I've come to really want to get an answer to; Why do female Revans *always* seem to cry at some point? I mean, obviously I'm speaking somewhat generally, but I've seen it happen quite a bit. Is there something I'm not getting? I mean, I am a guy and I guess there's tons of baggage that comes with that in relation to crying and all, but I just don't see a Revan of any gender just breaking down and sobbing. Least of all infront of someone. But I guess it's my lack of the feminine perspective (not being sarcastic, I swear).
Sorry if that last bit makes me sound like an **. I'm just curious. I very much love strong female characters (and their real-life counterparts) and Revan has some awesome potential to be one. Unfortunately, I only ever see female Revans that cry or angst. And if not that, ones that have an annoying faux-sassiness or attempts to come off as a cutesy badass (see: Mira). Where's the *real* female Revan?
--dreamshell-- |
 Rarecase 2007-05-19 . chapter 1Good story. I like how you mentioned the fact that Carth should be happy-it shows that he's not. (If that makes sense... :P) If you have the time, you should continue it... it has a lot of potential. |
 DaDoozer 2006-11-30 . chapter 1This is a favorite, just can't get enough of it or any of your writing actually *grins*. Anywho, good stuff! Looking forward to reading more of your stuff!
-Dooz |
 The-Kiss-of-Immortality 2006-07-31 . chapter 1Aw, that's really cute!! I like it a lot and I think that if you wanted, you could write a second or a third chapter. It could keep going but... that's up to you. I know I would read it.
Thanks
Shady |
 Gabrielle Lupin 2006-07-07 . chapter 1I'm a huge fan of your work, and once again, I loved it. Very cute. |
 AzureAquarius 2006-06-30 . chapter 1Whoa! Sa-wet! How very angsty! meh! i likesh it! I likesh it alot! WRITE MORE! DIDDY MAO! ^_^ Then I shall read and enjoy the next chapter anew! MUA HA! |
 jediserenity82 2006-03-28 . chapter 1breathtaking as always ^_^ |
 Queenofinsanity 2006-03-18 . chapter 1aw! how swet! |
 Junyi the Shadow 2006-02-23 . chapter 1Thanks for another wonderful story with my favourites - LSF Revan and Carth. I hope more chapters will soon follow! Keep it up, good piece of writing, vividly describing the surroundings and the inner movements of Carth, I hope you'll carry that on.
I'm anxious to read more! :) |
 Kipling Nori 2006-02-10 . chapter 1This is so pretty and sad. Poor Revan, seriously...what has she been up to these past few years?
I love it, and I really hope you continue this. :) |
 Your Sparrow 2006-02-02 . chapter 1beautiful |
 FaintlyAlarming 2006-01-28 . chapter 1Aw... |
 Child-of-the-Dawn 2006-01-28 . chapter 1ah, fluff..nice way to begin one's day ^_^ |