I liked the way you repeated that same phrase at the end of each paragraph. It added a sense of continuity to it all. Plus, as usual, the entire story was excellent. Typical. *scoffs* (Kidding there, of course!)

One word: Fantastic.

AH! I was wrong about me being mellow! My ...oh okay they are mellow again. damn it! wait, not damn it. I'm arguing with myself with no split emotions. great. That's crazy to a whole new level. You write very well. I like it. I don't have my glasses so I'm the walking/sitting/reading/writing/typing... stupid today.

I very much enjoyed this story! Raven's thoughts about Beast Boy were so passionate, I loved it. So far I've read dr.evil99's, TheUbu's and your stories for the challenge that you were given. That's such a great idea! I can say that all three of these stories were entirely different, so I haven't picked a favorite. I probably won't, I'm quite indecisive! It's not my fault, really! Anyways, your story was very touching and beautiful.

Thank you for writing such wonderful stories!

-Liss

Jumbly and tumbly works for this one. I like it a lot.

I loved the line "only for me." This fic was brilliant!

aw, Aw. That was very well written.

that is so sweet! I've already read dr.evil's story's. I'll be sure to read the others

*smiles warmly*

It is no where close to sucking. This oneshot was so sweet, and your hard work really paid of. I love how you repeated the line "For him. Only for him." That line and just the descriptive and poetic way you write, it made the oneshot sort of have this poem feel. And I also love how you ended this oneshot. Scratch that, I loved everything. You capture Raven so well. You put in a perfect mix of Romance, Angst, and BBRae in this, and in just a few paragraphs... I feel the urge to squeel. Amazing job!

Wow… After reading your entry for the challenge, I can clearly see that I didn’t put enough into the aftermath of the action. I’m very impressed with this story, just like all your work, you manage to write an amazing story without dragging unnecessary things (like action) out.

You think this was jumbly and tumbly? I thought it flowed rather nicely (as opposed to my choppy entry *rolls eyes*) and the “For him. Only for him.” gave it a touch of class.

Do you think you’d be interested in trying this again? I might just have a topic in mind if the others are game.

All in all a great job! I look forward to your next story.

Ubu

that was so GREAT! it's one of those few one shots that really are meant to be one shots, and you did a beautiful job with it!

Oh wow...

I knew that this challenge would suit you, as you are the undisputed Queen of the One-Shot, and your voice is so well suited to the medium. And, you've taken our little idea, and made it fly, as I knew you would.

It always seem like everything you do is so... i dunno... personal? you seem to have great empathy with your characters, like you're channeling them as you write. it's just astounding; I really felt like I was privy to Raven's thoughts, during her vigil.

As Kay said, now I want to get right to work on my entry, and I will, as soon as Paragon chapter 8 is finished. Kay will kneecap me if I don't get that ready soon...

Thank you for participating, and wonderful work

Oh my... Wow. ::grins:: That was amazing. I'm almost tempted to start my one-shot for the challenge. Key word: almost. I'm too busy slaving away over an original story at the moment... sorry! ::laughs::

Ah... My God. What you manage to show with only a few paragraphs, a repeating phrase, and a lot of ambiguisness. So very lovely... lovely indeed. One-shots work for you my dear, since you somehow make them tell more then a twenty-chapter story... though I think the reason is quite obvious.

How you get along without dialogue, though, is something I want to know and really want to be able to do. I always have to mess it up with words... you just skip over those messy things and move onto the beautiful, lyrical quality of your writing... ::sighs:: I am in awe. Sheer awe.

The only complaint I've got is you spelt my name wrong up top. It's Kayasuri-n, not Kaysuri-san. Sorry to be such a nit picker, but... you know how personal pride can be. ::blushes::

And, as always, I loved this. I'd say 'write more' but I'm not that... odd or deranged (sorry to any reviewers who did just that). Instead, I'll say that I hope you participate in more challenges in the future.

Kayasuri-n

well, if you found this difficult, you certainly put me in awe anyway :) I love your oneshots to pieces.

*RoseMage*