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| Silwyna 2006-07-02 ch 4,  | abuseThis story is great. I love how you write about Lee's depression. Will there be more? |
| Halcyon Impulsion 2006-06-07 ch 4, | abuseSadness :( I'm interested to see how you deal with Kara... she can be quite the puzzle at times. Write fast :) |
| Halcyon Impulsion 2006-06-07 ch 3, | abuseHave I told you lately that you're brilliant? No? Well, then... you're brilliant :) |
| Halcyon Impulsion 2006-06-07 ch 2, | abuseExcellent dialogue, excellent everything :) You rock! |
| Halcyon Impulsion 2006-06-07 ch 1, | abuseOh, this is fabulous... glad you'll have time to update now :) |
| Isabellec 2006-02-24 ch 1, | abuseHey--Dualla's there! She knows! She's also Adama's "daughter"! Let her be the one to help his father help Lee, please... |
| Isabellec 2006-02-24 ch 2, | abuseI'm so hoping that Dee will get involved in this story...I know most fans are thinking of her as the devil these days because she actually has the nerve to be with Apollo and NOT BE STARBUCK, but she heard what Apollo said, she's close to Adama and has been his advisor and counselor and helper before, she's the voice of home for the viper pilots, and she's not anywhere near as frakked up as Kara Thrace. I hope this story continues and that Dee can play a part. Good story, well written and I wish we'd seen a little more of Lee getting help--or at least some concern from-those he loves and those who love him in canon. This helps to fill in some gaps. |
| KAZ2Y567i 2006-02-19 ch 4, | abuseI greatly enjoyed your first chapter. I loved the minimal use of words between Lee & Adama. By saying so little, they have said so much. If that makes any sense. They are both men of few words and you have captured this essence. Keep up the good work. You have a great story in the making. Please don't end it to soon! |
| yannik 2006-02-18 ch 4, | abuseIt's great. For me at least :). You have a very mature look at depression, what you write is subtle, but to the point. Only thing that buggs me is Kara - she didn't want to think about the problem for a month, she hadn't yet fully recovered from her issues, and she suddenly remembers? She suddenly is all compassionate? I can see her ambivalence, allright, but it not enough. And she doesn't even address Lee's "help" with the dead pilot's callsigns, or... well, whatever. Well. Appart from that this story completes my thoughts of this subject (and my story, though those parts are not published yet ;), in so many ways, that I impatiently wait for each next installmet. Good luck writing. -Y- |
| Airam4u 2006-02-17 ch 4, | abuseI truly hope that you aren't leaving the story at this point! It says the story is complete but you have to have Lee talk to someone... don't you? |
| Kou Shun'u 2006-02-11 ch 3, | abuse“Close this time?” ^_^ yay tigh. and i like how hotdog was the one to come to him. |
| Kou Shun'u 2006-02-11 ch 2, | abuse“None of my business, young man…” Cottle’s sneer became a smirk, “unless it starts hurting you to pee.” ^_^ i really like seeing adama. i like how he comments is my whole family meesed up when seeing kara and how at the meeting he is keeping a close eye o nlee. |
| Kou Shun'u 2006-02-11 ch 1, | abuseyay, you said socialator. so far i like the first chapter. i do wish we had a bit more between father and son. |
| midnightair 2006-02-10 ch 3, | abusenice. i like how you did hotdog and how lee was almost ready to talk to his dad. more please! |
| Airam4u 2006-02-07 ch 2, | abuseStrong continuation... Looking forward to see what you have in mind! |