I liked the development (very good at keeping up the tension). But I dislike the fact that the usual consequences of Raven-feeling-emotions (namely, ** hitting the fan & the like) are absent save from the small mention about the cash register.

Also, though I know the prompt is best used by making a dialog-driven fic, I feel that the direction Robin & Raven's relationship takes with regards to dialog is under-expression rather than the declarations of love that they proclaim here.

Other than the aberration in character at the end, I really think this was well-done :D

Also: Grease reference FTW.

You just swept me off to LaLaland... o.O

i officialy love you and anything wright :)

i love you !oh and your story too :)

it was well written, but the plot was kinda similar to other stories i have read. but still, it was good. hope to read more!

WOW! wonderful story! *favs*

Very nicely done whether it was you first story or not. Please keep on writing, you have a talent for it. But, get yourself a beta, a little proofreading would have made the story even better. Well done. Thanks...Gerry

That was really good! keep up the good work, and just leave out BB and Star in your next stories.(I hate them!)

that was pretty good...i think you should have just read it over once more, there are some minor mistakes in tense, or just forgetting a couple of letters changing the meaning of the word(would, wouldn't)but it was pretty good, definetly cool

why sweat over a dying race?
-ashley

Great, awesome, wonderful... and just wow... this is totally awesome... and it wasn't short... not at all ^_^

I can't tell you enough how much I like your story... it is great how the story somehow resolves around my given line and the way you portrayed Raven is wonderful, because not many writers get her character right...

I just adore Robin in your story and how tried to make Raven talk/speak to him... that was beautiful and how Raven confessed her love him... awe... ^_^

Thank you very, very, very much in taking part in my challenge and I really do hope that you'll more TT-stories, because I really would like to see more from you... ^_^

Alena

It wasn't short! It was perfect! It was just brilliant! I loved it! You rock!