I really liked your story and your subject - Cringer was always my favorite. :) The only suggestion I have - you have this in the beginning:

"I feel a gentle breeze whip around me"

Whipping seems to imply a more forceful wind which is kind of at odds with a gentle breeze. But other than that the story is great!

nice one shot, Ashley. LOL. You should do Madame Razz (I think that's her name).