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| LegnaYokai 2008-06-29 ch 1, anon. | abusethis would have been a really good opener for a story about Bella's change and how everyone reacts. It would get readers prepared for Breaking Dawn. |
| Julsgracie 2008-05-31 ch 1,  | abuseWow. Very interesting. I like how you didn't really expose what was happening until the end...who she was talking to. It was really unique, unlike anything else I've read. Great job! |
| demolitionLover 2008-05-21 ch 1, | abusebella is so cruel! thank god she has never really done this. |
| stare at string 2008-03-27 ch 1, | abuseShe trusts Laurent? |
| XxLostinmyemotionsxX 2008-03-05 ch 1, | abuseI'm very upset that it's just a oneshot. That was really good. It grabs your attention from the begining and doesn't let go. Especially since you have no idea who the vampire is until the very end. Amazing, great writing:) |
| Yumeniai 2008-02-26 ch 1, anon. | abuseBeautifully written! I really like this idea, and this fic. |
| IsabellaMarieCullen3214 2008-01-17 ch 1, | abusevery interesting |
| Moonpetal Lily 2007-12-23 ch 1, | abuseWowza, that was seriously intense! I really liked how you let the reader figure out exactly what was going on instead of telling it all at the begining. Although...it would be nice to have more description of Laurent feeding on her. It's supposed to take tremendous willpower to stop, especially for vamps on a human diet. Does Bella ever doubt his ability to leave her alive? Does Laurent ever consider drinking her dry? |
| Patrick-Henry 2007-12-16 ch 1, | abuseOh wow! This is amazing. It was very exciting, and the writing was suberb. I really loved it! |
| princess-meow 2007-11-27 ch 1, | abuseO, fancy. You are wonderful darling. Seriously good job. If only this could have really happened. I've actually almost grown bored of the constant arguement between Edward and Bella over her mortality. Luv, luv. |
| Daintress 2007-11-06 ch 1, | abuseYou're leaving this as a one-shot?! What a great beginning it would be for a longer story! I hope to see more of it someday. :) |
| JacobBlackishott 2007-10-30 ch 1, | abuseSo cool!! With Laurent and everything.. I hope Edward isnt mad in your version! Great job, Jacobblackishott |
| Rainy Day In The Pines 2007-09-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is pre- newmoon, right? Are you writing more? Like how Edward acts towards her change, or ... her first months of being a vampire?... *Rain |
| Shadows of a Guardian Angel 2007-07-16 ch 1, | abuseexcellent chapter! it was really good, well written. to bad it's only a one shot... oh well. it was still really good! |
| WhereStarsComeFrom 2007-05-31 ch 1, | abusewow intense... did bela die? O! [shivering] well written fic! |