loved it!
luna

Aw. I need Edmund!!

Great story! Poor Edmund...

Ooh, your language is very descriptive and powerful, despite the convention errors. You do seem to have some word confusion (their, not they're, for instance, that one's near the end), and you can avoid using italics so many times, but I really did enjoy it. This is one of those rare exceptions to the generalization that good stories have to have proper grammar and spelling and such, 'cause despite a few errors you really have something convincing.

"Only now he was afraid that Peter was going to take the only thing he had left – his guilt." That would be my favorite line. Crepy. :)

Very nice self introspection from Edmund's pov. You really got to the heart of his guilt. Peter was impressive as well. Pointing out that children, no matter how much we want them to be, aren't adults until they truly are. Mistakes are made at all ages. And then: redemption.

Excellent work.

Only complaint: a wee bit o' grammar and punctuation errors. I'll live.