ABSOLUTE CRAP!

RAR!

Yes! Great update! I cannot wait for the next chapter.

I'm figuring he's a reborn or transported Gohan. (Dang family always WAS prone to amnesia.)

I love how the fight went, by the way.

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"But, but, I lost?" Kachu was trying to press her claim, but:

Brad was gentle in tone, but pitiless in intent. "But according to your own elders. I was knocked out by that same attack. Double KO means NO WINNER!"

Ranma just smirked in the background as Cologne idly considered bonking her head on the wall. They were going to have to review the Law, and that always led to a week or more of willowbark tea due to headaches.

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Just a thought.

Good work, and looking forward to seeing what Brad can do with Ranma and Ryoga.

Getting a little weird, but still a great story. Well done.

hm, interesting power trip your giving yourself here. nothing bad about it, but don't you think you could have kept the power level to a minimum for at least a little while i mean come on, Brad went from normal kid to super sayain in barely any time.

oh well this is ok for a powertrip, i've seen much worse.

why does shampoo have to be married with ranma and nabiki? you need to state how many ingadments genma made for ranma and how they were put to rest.

If you are going with just Ukyo,Shampoo,kodachi and the tendo's then heres some sugjesttions

Ukyo you could have nodoka take her into her faimly as her doughter, and genma haveing no perental rights.

kodochi= nabiki should of take care of that back when is got started buy soun and genma.

Shampoo=the thing aabout her is i see no claim on ranma because the callenge was staited over the frist prizse of the amozon truniment that the guide translatide to them(ranma said if i beat her everthing there is no problem said in gril from and shampoo nod inagrement)so there can be no marrige from that point of veiw.

the second time when shampoo was deafeted by ranma it was after he was engagd to the tendo's offcial and shampoo atacked the tendo place of living only because she saw the silowet of what she thought was gril-type ranma. plus she gave up the fight after one hit, Also ranma was defending aknae because at the time she was sick with the fue. this was on japan soil so i can not see a claim her ether, unless the amozon nation want to go to war over this with japan?

in the big melee battles that happen in ranma life he could have one of the guy nock her out and then she would be how to shy stuck with him if ranma didn't challenge the guy for shampoo hand in marrige. in the mean time if all engegments are taken care of the ranma and nabiki can get married with out the loss of honor and shampoo just can't have ranma redeafet her again.

just some thoughts and sugjestion drop me a e-amil and tell me want you thin? I realy enjoyed the srory.

Peace!

Singed GRIFFENVAMP

I think I know the story you got those from: A Tale of Two Wallets.

Well done.

Looking pretty damn good so far!
I was a little hesitent at 1st but once I started reading it I started loving it.

Derek The Rogue

Not too bad, and I agree, it does need some more work. Good luck, and I hope you take the time to polish it up some more for Ch 3.

What do you mean this is a lame fic? I don't have any problems with it^^

I'd like to know if this fanfic is part on a Ran/Nab cause if not then I'd sure like to see a flashback showing it. There's just a lot of things that don't make sense to me like when does this takke place in the Ranma verse also the've never taught classes in the dojo so how'd that happen just a lot of stuff that doesn't fit together for me. Please respond

A SI this time, eh? And you're Goku?
Well, I'll give it a chance.