LOL, some of this stuff was pretty funny. A nice story.

Well, this is certainly an enjoyable and well-paced novelette. The idea of Aika accidentally slipping herself the nightmare potion is a great premise, and Vyse and Aika's ensuing quest was interesting and exciting. The battle with the Black Pirates was very imaginitive, and I'm glad that they didn't get the short shrift.

The aftermath of Aika's awakening was very well done, too. It wasn't a huge surprise that the antidote wouldn't completely cure her, but the way it played out definitely wasn't quite what I would have expected. Nice that Aika learned a lesson out of it in the end.

The major flaw with this story is that the characterizations were sometimes off a bit. In particular, Fina seemed out of character more often than not. Nonetheless, a fine read.

Very good so far. The first chapter is a delightful bit of fun. Has the feel of a very typical day in a Blue Rogue vacation, without being at all boring, and the ending is a tantalyzing little surprise.

I like the idea of Aika happening to bump into Vigoro, and the resulting revenge plot develops very smoothly. Aika's improvised revenge on Vigoro was going a bit too far, though, and it was very out of character for her. The resulting jokes were rather unpleasant, as well.

Overall, though, very nice pacing and characterizations. I'll be reading the rest of this shortly.

What's with the lack of quotation marks? Trying something new? It really makes the story hard to read if you don't use quotations and start a new paragraph when someone is talking. I didn't even read the whole thing because it would strain my eyes.

I know this story has been up for a while, but I needed to get this out there in the open. Seriously; you seem to have a lot of potential. Oh yeah, please add more detail.

Great that you got this posted. Keep writing!

I'll just translate the previous one (it's in Swedish)

"It was nice, not my style, but really good. This is a story which makes you longing for a new one.
Keep it up, and you might get famoused."

den var bra, inte min stil, men verkligen bra. detta är en historia som man längtar tills det kommer en ny.

fortsätt så, så kanske du blir känd