its OK but a little short. slow down the story progression a bit.

Not bad, not bad:)

WILD! I wish i could write like that!

::blinkblink:: Well... THAT was an interesting twist...

Ok, two words asses this situation for heero, and they are as follows: "oh, sh*t" tehehehe... intersting little concept here... I like!

O_O;;;... a little OOC, but other than that melike.

Hey, this is good! I'm glad you didn't make Duo die. He's my favorite charater. Nice work, keep it up.