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| French Pop 2008-01-25 ch 1, | abuseAs a female, this story made MY uterus cringe (no pun intended). But after reading your notes at the end, I can only somewhat sympathize with you, because most men are just as guilty of the "crime" Jenny was punished for. But regardless of that, this story rocks. |
| The Light Under the Door 2007-11-19 ch 1, | abuseI really like this. This is roguequeen from dA, by the way. I know what you mean. I'm a woman myself and I hate when other girls do this, it makes me mad, and it changes how men view themselves, which in turn changes how they view us. Some guys are like this, too, though. =/ Flirting with you and making you feel special, then moving on to the next victim with no thought of how you feel about it. Heh. Good writing, WONDERFUL visualizations, but watch some of your grammer, you have a few fragments. Other than that, great job. =) -Debbie |
| Qzil.wrat121 2007-11-17 ch 1, | abuseThis was really good. I agree a lot of women do tease men to feel empowered, Jigsaw/John/Amanda should go for someone like that. |
| alex 2006-11-04 ch 1, anon. | abusewell, this isnt a flame, so worry not. the idea is an interesting one, thats for sure. and its definitly jigsaw-worthy. its an interesting point of view to be writing a saw fan fic from. and in the most respectful way possible, you can tell that the author is a male. sorry but you just can. its very good though. contiue? you should. alex |
| Not Human 2006-04-16 ch 1, | abuseYou are a misogynist. You're a pretty good writer, though, so hopefully you'll grow out of your sociopathic phase. Be warned, though; you can't use a movie as an excuse to torture a girl who turned you down, blame every other girl in your school, and avoid being called exactly what you've made yourself out to be. Also, you + are = you're. |
| Error-in G 2006-03-08 ch 1, | abuseAll I can say is WOW! I mean, sure, sounds like Jugsaw...really does...hm...Yipe...ouch, that was harsh...really, it was. I had a little bit of trouble understanding the-er-contraption. BUt other than that, it was well written. And I hope that you don't assume that all girls/women are total teases. Because I'm not. It does have a good lesson, though. Bein' a tease can get you into a world of trouble. Well, I'm rambling...ok, well, good work...I guess... |
| Lawrence 2006-03-04 ch 1, anon. | abusethat was a total rip off, and a pretty cheesy on at best. |
| Oracle Thunder 2006-02-28 ch 1, | abuseSo basically you inserted yourself into this story as Jigsaw and Jenny as some girl who was a ** to you and we get this little literature gem? Ok I like it. Very creative...contraption. |
| creaturesanctuary 2006-02-24 ch 1, | abuseHey wait a minute here, what about me. Im female and all I get in the world is teasing from men. I have never in my life teased a man like that and all I get in return is teased myself maybe you just havent met the right girl the story by the way was really good and makes me realize i should never start teasing guys i may just end up dead |
| jdehn 2006-02-23 ch 1, | abusei dont think this really fits jigsaw. it seems more like this is about revenge but jigsaw didnt really do revenge..he was teachin them a lesson. and really..the little "lesson" you tried to put in just doesnt seem to fit jigsaw. Besides that it was good. |
| The Cynical Flower Girl 2006-02-21 ch 1, | abuseUm, ow. That's... harsh. Scary part: It seems like something he'd do, but would be too graphic to put in the movies (but then again, maybe not). One thing, though... should I fear you? Little nervous over here, heh. We're not all bad! I don't tease my bf unless he wants me to... |
| JediBeastboy 2006-02-06 ch 1, | abuseDude, kick ** story man, I'm with you, I to have been shot down by so many woman. I am not going to flame you, I'm applauding man, nice work. I can definitly see Jigsaw (John) do this to a woman. Keep up the good work, write another one like this. |