Reviews for One Touch, One Glance

Reviews For: One Touch, One Glance - Reviews: Page 1 of 7

FelicityOConnor 2007-09-30 ch 1,	abuseOMG WHAT HAPPENED TO FELICITY O'CONNOR! I NEED TO KNOW, THIS AFFECTS MY VERY EXISTENCE!
MrsNott 2007-09-15 ch 7,	abuseOh my! I lovbe this story!! Please do update or rewrite it soon!
Owl Emporium 2007-08-31 ch 8,	abuseContinue soon please! I loved this, it made me almost cry...but i loved it! Please, continue now! :] Angelica
coco162_2006 2007-02-27 ch 8, anon.	abuseKEEP WRITING PLEASE!
iluvlilnjames 2007-01-30 ch 8,	abuseU CANT DISCONTINUE THIS STORY! I HAVE BEN CRYING MY EYES OUT MAN! ITS HURTS!...please please continue...i beg you...please?
Broadway L0VE 2007-01-07 ch 7,	abuseHeylo. Random Rose. Just droppin in to say hi. Love your story. Anyways, here's another review to add to your collection. -Me.
Maraudess 2006-12-13 ch 8,	abusereelly good story, please hurry and finish!
KrElric 2006-09-19 ch 8,	abuseAw I love this fic!! Is so nice and well written, besides it makes you think. I love depressing things (I'm a sort of a masochist in that sense) but it's rerally lovely! I hope you post soon "losing her wings" because I'm dying seperatedly to know what comes next!!
Lily's Petal 2006-08-10 ch 8,	abuseit was good why did you atop? i was getting really anxious because i wanted to know what was going to happen
dracosbabygrl 2006-08-03 ch 8,	abusedamn. lily is antisocial but i love this fic!
Akt5us 2006-08-02 ch 8,	abuseI can't wait to read the new story!
Bucky Katt Rocks 2006-08-02 ch 8,	abuseThis is an interesting story, you can definitely go somewhere with it. I'll keep my eye out for the re-write. And just as a note: Lily would not be manically depressed, because that is having extreme highs and lows. She is probably more chronic depression, cuz she's always low. At least, that's how I thought you wrote her. (I took a psych class once, so I'm not an authority, but I thought it might help your story).
Yankee 2006-08-02 ch 8, anon.	abuseIf you dont wanna continue writing,just stop but dont fill the pages. Your story started really good but slowly lost its charm. Try to put some more creativity into it!
icedance 2006-06-29 ch 7, anon.	abuseAre you going to finish the story soon? Becasue if you aren't, then i need to know so that i'm not wasting my time.
Folk 2006-06-24 ch 1,	abuseHmm...interesting. (This is from the evil mind that brought you "A Hogwarts Autumn", which I see you at least attempted to salvage...haha sorry about that) ;). First of all, the mechanics are fine. The sentence structure is fine. The problem is the characterization. I think Lily is a much stronger character than this (Harry doesn't get everything from his dad, y'know); this reminds me strongly of Cho-who-cried-all-the-time. I do love the descriptions, specifically of the silver lily on the diary and things like that, but I think that you would be better suited to write Lily as a strong character who just gets fed up with all the other girls' teasing etc. until one day she FINALLY breaks down and cries. Also...she's known--and hated--James since at least 5th year, so maybe you could edit this chapter so that she suddenly sees him as someone potentially nice? Good situation and all if worked on a bit! (Revising...the wosrt part of writing...gah). Good luck! Ciao, Ivy :)

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