Hmm. Well, the lyrics fit in quite nicely with the story, which is more than I can say for more songfics.

Two CCs:

Artemis' 'voice' didn't seem... right. It felt too familiar, too... casual. It just didn't seem like *Artemis*. Not too sure what you can do about it, but I guess it's just a whole lot of subtle thingies.

The other thing: Artemis was very much obsessed with Aurum potestas est in the books. It seems a little disconnected with the canon view, versus your view. If you made the transition between the two, this fic would be so cool, 'cause you provide all these great examples of what Artemis won't do, what he doesn't like about his dad, etc, but it's just so disjointed from the canonical view without quite being AU enough to be obvious. I dunno. Something like that.

I like all the examples and stuff, and there's some pretty nice oneliners [s]that I might steal for my own fics.[/s] For example:

'“Why?” It was my favorite question nowadays.'

Simple, but oh-so-perfect.

Good work! I think you're the only one really posting their Labors. I decided to try to write all of mine all at once, which is interesting, 'cause I have three novels and fourteen oneshots all sitting on my desktop. Hehe, way to go!