 a dreamer's attic 2009-01-14 . chapter 1wow, this is a truly excellent introspective about what it takes to become a SeeD, both serious with just enough sprinkling of humor. It starts well, it continues strong and it ends perfectly. Well done ^_^
~CR |
 irishais 2007-06-08 . chapter 1I like this, very much. It's a refreshing "not a hero" perspective, which avoids the entire realm of "Mary Sue." Nicely written, excellent word choice, and the scene of the cadet on the ground cursing at Irvine is pretty much totally awesome.
~irishais |
 alescA Munroe 2006-12-09 . chapter 1XD Hooray for making out with the SeeD commander! |
 Lisa 2006-03-05 . chapter 1 I love your writing - and this is such a good post game fic (with Squall/Zell my FF8 OTP *squee*!)
Just one small nitpic - I think that you were thinking about SODIUM not magnesium as exploding when hitting water. (Sodium explodes in water, magnesium burns brightly/hotly at relativly low temperatures) |
 gietzeng 2006-02-11 . chapter 1Very, very nice. I love exploring Garden's moral ambiguities both in my own work and in other people's. You've encapsulated it nicely. Bravo. |
 Fimbrethil 2006-02-09 . chapter 1Brilliant! |
 Aegof 2006-02-07 . chapter 1Tiny typo in the third-to-last paragraph. "Sixth" should be "six."
Very nice piece. The slash seems a little random, but not out of place, somehow. Nice work. |
 Lapis.Blue 2006-02-07 . chapter 1'Rambling first person' is the most fun to write, and it's usually quite fun to read as well. ^^ I like how the main character is not one of the FFVI cast, but is a new character viewing the cast from a fresh perspective.
It also happens to be very well written, brings across character well (Zell especially) and the ending paragraphs of her as a SeeD really puts the whole 'SeeD' idea into perspective. SeeDs are mercenaries, but few stories take advantage of or use that fact. I'd say you're a good writer, but judging by the skill level, you probably already know that. >_ |
 Nalanzu 2006-02-06 . chapter 1Rambly and first-person it is, and I like it. It's a very candid presentation of what it might be like to be a SeeD. (And ha, magnesium in the toilets. I wish someone had done that when I was at college.) |