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tony 2008-04-15 ch 1, anon.	abusehey i love this story...are you ever going to continue it or is it abandoned? i hope you will update it soon!
CanonSnupin 2007-10-21 ch 15,	abuseKeep going!
Cattatra 2007-08-10 ch 14,	abusewah gief update! (Had to review for this chappy coz i've already reviewed once for chapter 15 :D)
zafaran 2007-07-23 ch 15,	abuseMore, more, please. This is a fascinating variation on the Severus/Harry son theme, and I'm eagerly looking forward to see what you do with the upcoming chapters. I wish I'd found this story sooner, but then I'd have already been waiting eagerly for more chapters and disappointed that you've not posted more since January. :) It's definitely getting marked in my RSS reader so I can watch for updates. I hope your schedule and muse will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm
drucie99 2007-06-08 ch 15,	abuseOh...I love this story too. I noticed you haven't updated since January. Do you think you will update soon? I am not sure which story to hope for update first. I love them all!
drdeth2000 2007-06-07 ch 15,	abuseGreat story, I like the twist on Snape being Harry's father, very different to the other stories out there, I look forward to the next chapter
Quail Egg 2007-06-01 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow! Enjoying this already, well done! I've just noticed a mistake though, you said Harry passed with seven OWLs, it's actually twenty (although that seems a bit much!) A, E & O are all pass grades whilst P, D & T are all fail grades. Sorry to be such a know-it-all, but I thought you should be aware! Kifera xx (wish I got 20 A-levels!)
cylobaby 2007-05-23 ch 5,	abuseHarry is so Snape's son. I guess. I'll find out in a few chappies, I'm sure.
cylobaby 2007-05-23 ch 1,	abuseI always thought that Harry should get a snake bff like voldie has.
Otspock 2007-05-20 ch 15,	abuseThis is a great fic! I absolutely love it. Keep up the good work!
Tamyka 2007-05-09 ch 15,	abuseGr so damn close! This story is wicked! It's going to be interseting to see how it comes out. Until then!
Cattatra 2007-04-28 ch 15,	abusethis is a brilliant fic. pls update soon, im really into this :D
Shadow Lighthawk 2007-03-14 ch 15,	abuseI've really enjoyed reading this so far. It's intricate and complex, with some very interesting little twists, and I’m looking forward to seeing where it goes. I don't mind saying that I was disappointed that there wasn't more of it up. I guess I'll start with Harry, seeing as how he's the main character. I like your Harry a lot. He seems like a good kid, despite the enormous amount of crap he's had to put up with. One thing I think you've done very well is to convey the confusion and difficulties that come with growing up, especially growing up in the middle of a political-social upheaval. Your Harry is a very conflicted one, it seems to me. There are times when he's smart and driven and even inspired, and then there are times when he's timid and hurting and incredibly vulnerable. It's an interesting contradiction, and I think it gives Harry a lot of humanity. I'm looking forward to seeing how Harry resolves some of his problems. I do think that your Severitus plot was a bit heavy-handed. You got the point across, but there wasn't a lot of subtlety to it. On the other hand, I liked the set of coincidences that went with the discovery. Harry having to detox and the glamour cancellation happening so close together, plus Snape's Potions blunder at the same time. It was kind of nifty. More importantly, it was plausible. The only part of it that felt even a little like a deus ex machina was Snape's blunder, and that's pretty easily forgiven. Another thing I like is that knowing about his relation to Snape, while it has certainly been the cause for lots of angst and soul-searching, hasn't completely taken over Harry's life. It's taken over a good bit of it, but it hasn't consumed his every waking thought, which I appreciate. Severus is... interesting. He doesn't seem to me to be as well-developed a character as Harry, which I suppose is to be expected, all things considered. Still, I do wish that he was a little clearer. Of course, Severus is in the process of re-assimilating an awful lot of his past, which would make anyone inscrutable. The thing I like best about your Severus so far is the way he's taking steps towards being Harry's family. I'm looking forward to him tackling the conversation about James and Lily, as well as Harry's reaction to it. The other conversation Harry and Snape will have to have is one about the way Severus has acted towards him all these years. I think there's definitely an apology owed, and a more cohesive one than his stammering attempt earlier. At any rate, though, I like how invested Severus is in forming a real relationship with Harry. The fact that you paired Severus and James, instead of James and Lily, was a bit of a surprise to me, but I like it. I've seen something like this done before, actually, and while I'm not sure anything will ever equal that particular story, this one is uniquely intriguing. I also like the plot twist that was attached to this part of the plot. You had me going for a while, wondering what the actual configuration of Harry's three parents was. That was well done. I'm definitely looking forward to finding out more about that part of Severus' past. I though Lupin's reaction was interesting. Actually, I'm rather conflicted about it. In some respects, I rather resent it, because I really like Remus as a character and I really hate homophobes. On the other hand, it was an interesting surprise, and while it would be nice for the Wizarding World to be "enlightened," there are enough muggleborns that it's not realistic. Someone was going to be upset about it, and Remus has more reasons than most, being invested in James and Lily's memory as he is. It will be interesting to see how that all falls out, as well as seeing how Harry reacts to Lupin's reaction. Dumbledore is probably the one character that I'm most personally conflicted about. In my mental tally, he goes back and forth from good guy to bad. He's ridiculously meddlesome, keeps back very important information, and manipulates people and events without care or remorse, and that's just for starters. But then he'll go and do something decent, like telling Harry that the prophecy was fake. He also seems to be genuinely well-intentioned, not just acting it in order to manipulate better. So, I really don't know what to think about the old man. Most of the time, though, it seems that I'm angry at him for things he's doing or has failed to do. It doesn't help that I'm practically conditioned to be distrustful of him. And what was his issue with Severus and James? It seems (to my admittedly over-developed paranoia where he's concerned) that there's going to be some kind of problem there. The one thing that this fic has not shortage of is confusion. Confusion in the Wizarding World, Harry's personal confusion about just about everything in his life, Severus' confused memories... On the one hand, it's a little aggravating. As a reader, I like for there to be things that are stable enough for me to hold on to. On the other hand, confusion is part of reality. Most of the time, we can only make educated guesses about what's going on in the world and even about other people. The best thing about fiction is that most of the confusion finds resolution at some point, and really, I think that's one of the things that I'm most looking forward to. The Council was a wonderful surprise. I was expecting that Harry would inherit some kind of political power, either from James or from Sirius, but the Council came as a complete surprise to me. I love the idea that there's a body working somewhat behind the scenes, with people from both sides, all of whom are more committed to that body and their families than to any other politics. It makes for a marvelous island in the midst of political turmoil. I definitely like the way that the Council facilitates information flow, too. Aside from those things, I like the idea that the Council will outlast political movements and Lords Dark or Light. It's a nice sense of stability and continuity, and I hope Harry will learn to value that. I'm also intrigued to learn what the Council actually does, since it seems to have its fingers in just about everything. Malfoy was another delightful surprise. The idea of him not as a follower of Voldemort but as a free agent is a fascinating one. In some ways, it feels like Malfoy is representative of the Council. Acting behind the scenes, as a law unto itself, for greater goals than the average Witch or Wizard really contemplates. I think Malfoy is going to be a fascinating character. I loved his dogs, too. They had to have been adorable. I'm not sure if Malfoy meant them to set Harry at ease (I wouldn't put it past him) or if he really was just sitting there petting his lapdogs. Or both. The best part is, it's an interesting bit of characterization either way. Speaking of plot twists, one that threw me all out of proportion was the idea that Charlie, Fred and George aren't actually Weasleys, but Prewetts. That particular idea absolutely blows me away, and I can't quite pinpoint why. I love how it ties into the Council, though, with Charlie as the Prewett on the Council. The sense of 'secret life' that clings to the Council is shared and augmented by the fact that Charlie and Fred and George, who have always seemed so squeaky-clean and above-board, are part of it. Harry's scar-hider potion was well-done. I like that it took a certain drive for him to be able to brew well. As an early indicator of the Severitus plot it was pretty standard, but no less well done for that. I like the idea of Harry brewing on his Aunt's stove. The beautiful thing about Harry's summer brewing was how well you bore it out. It wasn't just a fun little plot point; it had an effect, it had consequences. The idea of Brewer's Blood was a wonderful one. Though I'm not sure that the effects would have been as severe as you mentioned, considering how relatively little brewing he did, I still love the way it tied into the larger plot. I would go so far as to say that the Brewer's Blood was inspired. I also love the idea of Harry (with help, of course) submitting a research paper. It seemed strange at first thought, but I’m very enamored of the idea now, for two reasons. One, it's an accomplishment that has nothing to do with Harry's name or celebrity. It doesn't even have to do with his Quidditch skill or magical power. The potion, like all truly amazing inventions, was an accident and Harry had the interest and the drive to carry it through. The other reason is that having Harry submit a paper breaks into the contained atmosphere of Hogwarts. It shows Harry and co. interacting with the outside world and reaching beyond Hogwarts' sheltered confines, and I like that. Not only is it good for them, it reinforces the idea that they're all growing up. I'm fascinated that you chose to make the prophecy fake. Was there a reason for that, or did you just feel like it? I've got to say, you could go some strange places with it. I know that making the prophecy fake has to fit in with a greater plot somewhere, and I'm very curious about what it is. I'm also curious about what this will do to Harry's characterization. I suppose only time will tell. There are a few mechanical things about the story that I wanted to mention. First, there are some very odd sentences floating around here and there. Those sentences have too many words, or there are words omitted, or they're so scrambled as to make no sense. I'm inclined to believe that most of it is leftover from editing, but it's very disconcerting to be reading and them to blunder into one of them and wonder where the hell my train of thought went. My second mechanical concern is formatting, or rather the lack of it. You tend to go from one scene to another with little-to-no warning, and that's another thing that kind of throws me off. Usually I can tell when a scene is ending, but occasionally it's like a CD skipping - a switch from one scene to the next with no warning at all. Both of those issues, I think, can be fixed easily if you ever go back and revise. The other problem that I keep seeing is a sort of... undirectedness in the flow of the story. This is much more nebulous and subjective, of course, but it seems sometimes like the story is flailing around, unsure of where it's headed. I’m not quite sure what's producing that effect/ I wish I could point to something concrete, but I can't, and for that I apologize. Still, I wanted you to know that I got that feeling, just so you could be alert for whatever might be doing it. One last thing - will we be learning more about Dark magic vs. Light magic? I really hope so - Malfoy's description sounded fascinating. Looking forward to the next chapter! ^_^
insanechildfanfic 2007-02-11 ch 15,	abusepoor misunderstandings...though Remus, ticked me off
Meggplant 2007-02-10 ch 15, anon.	abusebashes both boys' heads together argh! they're so tiresome! there's so much miscommunication happening, i can't wait until the chapter where everything gets resolved. this Council thing is incredibly intriguing, i'm looking forward to learning more about it - and i want to know what's going to happen now that we know the prophecy is false! woot! love the story, can't wait for more, cheers! xoxox

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