Too sad! No, Shep can't die...

NO!

Okay, as traumatising as that was, i was really beautifully written. Great exposition.

That was really sad. Good job.

hello,you wright god stories, this one is no exception, but i hope sheppard is death only in this story!

Hope they get it right in season 3

keep the god work, and many congratulations for your stories

Bye

Rui

wow, that's so sad, but very well written

You really shouldn't kill him, I feel all sad now.

But it was very real, let's just hope it never happens...

Dude! You rock. Perfectly in character for Teyla, and her voice rung absolutely true. Teyla is one of the most difficult characters to write for, because she has a formality that doesn't lack warmth, and its sometimes difficult to pull that off. But you managed to nail it perfectly with this one. I also thought the way you had her think and react was extremely important. You had the action, and you had the internal monologue, and you balanced everything wonderfully.

I even LOVED her reaction to Sheppard's death. I'm not a shipper of these two (duh!), but this story and her reaction rang completely true. When Rodney laid a hand on her at the end? Dude, that was awesome. When I have time, I'm reading more of your work - whether they by S/T or not!

Tragic for sure but very well done. great action stuff in there, only thing that was confusing was McKay running towards Teyla with Elizabeth, since I didn't realise he'd gotten through first...

Very moving. Great work. I loved your descriptons throughout, and was very saddened by the death. :(...To bad he can't come back. :D

*SOBBING* NO, not another John and Teyla tragedy...I know you warned me,but,but,but,how could I stay away from your awesome writing..*SOBBING*

In a sickening, horrible, way..this is AWESOME! I can't believe I just wrote that! The description, the tension, the words, the expressions were perfect...OH, MY Goodness! You aren't bringing him Back? RITTER< RITTER>>..TELL HER TO BRING HIM BACK! TELL HER HOW TO DO IT>OH>MY SHIPPY HEART!

Wow. That brought tears to my eyes! Incredibly well written and sad! Thanks!

nice piece of Sheyla angst.

good work

Inara

Where's Bones when you need him for the declaration? Liked Teyla's point of view. Good emotion and not too over the top. Nice quiet rage and sorrow. Enjoyed.

This was so sad! But beautifully written. The action was plotted well and the last few paragraphs were heart-breaking...

I find character death stories to be hard to write. This was well written and I almost cried myself.