That was a really nice rounder. You got into him well. I like that he left her his number. And you totally hit the nail on the head- the reason that she will never work out with Logan is that he can never truly understand her. Even if they can have a really nice relationship for a while, eventually their differences will come between them because they're not just little differences- they're life creating/altering/ending differences. And hopefully she'll realize that she deserves to have someone that she can open herself up to entirely and have him accept her without judging her first. Good chapter and good fic :)

Good chapter. You did a good job of getting into her head and opening things up.

I kind of feel for him, but he is pretty screwed in the head. While I appreciate the way you wrote his thought processes, even some of what you wrote demonstrates that he doesn't care about her the way she deserves to be cared for. And that he's not that great of a guy- belittling her, condescending towards her, and pretty self-centered. Good chapter- you seem to have wrapped him up really well.

That was a really great fanfic. I loved the whole thing. _

That was great! I really enjoyed this one. _

That was good. I really liked it. _

NEVER FINISH? Releases the angry hoards of pink bunnies who track down and force authors to finish Ha Ha Ha! (Oh I wish it was that easy!)

good story! i cant wait to read zach's.

write more soon its kicken butt

Good! Keep Going!

no no no no no no, u are going come back and finish what you started, u cannot just rite something bout zack's feelings and then stop there!no no no! u carry this own girl! u'd better, i wanna know what happens to them they goto get it on on, max and logan that is,

oh by the way isn't Logan 32, i think he was born in 1988.

Great insights. Strong edgy writing. Well done. Looking for more!

I think you got his thoughts really well. Good.