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I like it but raven's dad raped her mom it in the comic book just to let you know but yeah its your story I really like it good job

Ahh...it all makes sense now. Psychological trauma can explain so much.

Woot! Butt kicking! About freakin time.

You mean to tell me that Bruce was at the Joker's mercy for hours and all he has to show for it is a single scalp would? I find that VERY hard to believe. The Joker is depraved, he's even more twisted then I am when it comes to torture (Er...you didn't hear that. Shh.). I can't see him wasting an opportunity like that.

But as to the romantic ending...there can be only one reply. *vomits all over thread* Blegh...sorry to soil your story, but romance never set well with me. It's a weakness I need to work on. I'll uh...I'll just clean this mess up. *runs of to find bleach and cleaning products*

Good story! I remain impressed. You have come very far.

Gah...apologies for the horrendous misspellings in the last review...I accidentally submitted it before I could use the spell check. Stupid me...

By the way...I think the correct word for 'wincing his eyes' is squint or more specifically 'Squinting, he looked for the source of the noise.'

Kudos on the uncomfortable task of explaining the concept of rape to Starfire. I could visualize that scene on the show with ease. Not that it ever would be because...yeah...kiddy show and all that...but if it ever WAS...you know...I could see it.

Getting the Joker involved started out as a very awesome plot twist. I was quite excited about it. Yet again, I am forced to wonder at Raven's total lack of kick **. If she can explode a few lousy light bulbs then why can't she explode Joker's lousy head? I ASSUMED that the only reason she got kidnapped was that Joker knocked her out right away, drugged her or something similar. He is known to be fond of gasses and the like. But she is obviously conscious now. Since when does being tied up prevent her from levitating the heck out of there?

The story started out very strong. Even Raven losing her cool, Robin yelling at her, and her running off to Gotham made a twisted sort of sense. People do stupid things, especially teenagers, and the consequences aren't always pretty. But now I'm concerned that you may be drifting back to the kind of unlikely scenarios that stood out in your last tale that I commented on.

Another chapter to read...we'll see how it goes. Personally I'm rooting for Bats and Raven to KICK SOME BUTT ALREADY!!

Oh yeah...I remembered another point I wanted to make. Raven's telepathy with Robin. I know she has that ability, but it always required effort, concentration, her aura popping into his (bad description *slaps hand* but it's the best I can come up with so late at night). In this story it's eerily effortless. So did I miss something on the show or is that simply your interpretation of her ability?

And I think that the toast "tanning" is a perfectly acceptable way of describing it! No one should take issue with THAT, maybe the unnesary details of MAKING the toast since it dragged on (seriously, we all know how toast is made. Our minds will automatically fill in the blanks without you detailing every step), but not that specific way of putting it. Heck, I might use it myself someday if you don't mind.

And the whole Trigon thing...it's cartoon network. They aren't going to mention it if Raven's mom wasn't a "willing partisapant". But think about it...with Trigon's contempt for other living things, particularly humans, and the fact that Raven was esstially only born to become his gateway into this dimention, do you really think he would bother to MARRY a human?

You're right, that definetely isn't something that Batman would would say. But at least you recednize that. Your story, your call.

Holy cow! There is such a marked improvement between this and Cat Scratch Fever (which I still think you should complete by the way...even if you need to rewrite the first chapter) it's almost scary! *rounds of applause*

EVERYTHING is better...I don't even know where to start. I'm so impressed. If I didn't know better I would say the same person didn't even write both stories.

Raven's thought process seems a little unlikely, but she isn't really thinking clearly, is she? Typical teenager, acting before she thinks. But why Gotham I wonder? I mean what appeal would that city hold? Robin must have talked about what a hell hole it is...oh...right...this is Raven we're talking about. The better question would be why WOULDN'T she go to Gotham? (HA! See? You even have me thinking out loud! Puzzling, hypothesizing, and answering my own questions. That's a very good sign!)

Just one thing...I cannot agree with your depiction of Raven's rape.

Let me explain...I don't take issue with the event. Well, not too much. This IS Gotham after all. I just don't think it was very believable. At least not the way it was portrayed.

Even without her powers, she is a dangerous girl. If two thugs were about to rape her, exhausted or not, she would fight them like a wild thing, and probably kick some serious ** to boot. Now, they are bigger and stronger than her, so it's possible they could overpower her if she was deprived of her powers.

Which brings me to my second nitpick...Raven not being able summon her powers. I can't recall any instance in the show when exhaustion hampered her powers...but my memory may very well be faulty. So let's say you're correct. What I do know for certain is Raven's powers are fed by her emotions (duh) and the more powerful her emotions, the more out of control her powers can be. Being assaulted brings out some pretty damn powerful emotions...trust me on this. Therefore, I hypothesize that not only would that give her powers a huge boost (regardless of whether or not exhaustion affects them), and the fear alone would give her an adrenaline boost to let her temporarily overcome her fatigue and kick **.

But...all that is simply my personal opinion. You have every right to interpret things differently. Plus, I say all that more as a fan then a slightly more experienced writer offering constructive criticism. There IS a difference between the two viewpoints.

I would offer more advice, but I'm not sure you need it. ;)

Now...on to the next chapters! Let's see if the rest of this is as good...

neat story. it made a good read, thanks.

this is a review for both chapters. i tried to submit it for chapter 2, but it didn't work, so here i am! i agree that the characters are ooc, but... wow. i never really saw this kind of angle in a titan story before. and poor starfire! imagine not knowing what happened to your friend and then... *shudders* ick. and poor raven! OMG, she so needs a hug. :) and someone please go kick robin for yelling at her. *raises hand* I'll do it! *kicks picture of robin on closet door* OK, that hurt. Sorry Robin! *pats picture* :)(: