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| Tw33ty JR. 2008-05-20 ch 15,  | abusethis is very good i really like it i wanna se hpw the fight turns out between hinata and naruto even though it seems like naruto isnt doing too good right now but hinata seems to be holding her own i also wanna see how everyone else turns out looking forward to reading the next chapter so i hope you can update when u can ^_^ |
| Darth-Taisha 2008-03-28 ch 15, | abuseAwesome! Terrific job with the whole fic, I think you did a wonderful job with Naruto and Hinata and the fight scenes are realistic also. Too bad you haven't finished this fic. I hope in the future you will finish it. |
| KuroAisu1 2008-01-03 ch 15, | abusetight stor man i can't wait for the next update |
| KuroAisu1 2007-12-31 ch 7, | abusetight story |
| swordbunny4486 2007-11-15 ch 15, | abusecool |
| Choas Babe 2007-08-05 ch 15, | abuseI love "Team 8." Very well done and it fits into each character. |
| DanteHyuuga 2007-08-02 ch 15, | abuseNice job can't wait for an update. |
| Viridian 2007-07-16 ch 15, | abuseIt's good to see both Hinata and Sakura give good showings. I hope it's not over for Naruto yet! Anyway, it's been a year, but I hope you haven't completely shelved this project yet. It's probably difficult to write these fight scenes, but I hope you'll find the inspiration to continue! |
| Viridian 2007-07-16 ch 13, | abuseOh no! "No matter how bad things get --" things can always get worse? >_< Well, not that that was unexpected, but ... how exciting! And I guess Hinata will find out the truth? I sure hope Naruto puts up a good fight! |
| Viridian 2007-07-16 ch 11, | abuseOh! That's an interesting development with the Akatsuki. I like how you're developing the relationship between Naruto and Hinata. It feels unforced and natural. I also enjoy the observations of Iruka -- and especially Konohamaru! |
| Viridian 2007-07-16 ch 10, | abuseYour approach to Hiashi's character is interesting. I'm glad you went with this more meaningful route, than just making him a hateful character. |
| Viridian 2007-07-16 ch 9, | abuseWow, that's a serious guilt trip right there, courtesy of the Sharingan. I think the thought that Sasuke actually needed him and had faith in him in his darkest moment, and he was let down must really tear Naruto up more than anything else. That was really insightful. |
| Viridian 2007-07-16 ch 7, | abuseI like how you've depicted Naruto here. He's still naive and oblivious, but also perceptive and understanding with his greater maturity. |
| Viridian 2007-07-16 ch 5, | abuseAh, poor Shino -- yet again! Anyway, even though you're treading familiar ground by describing events that more or less happened in the manga, I'm finding myself enjoying your approach immensely. There are a few spelling mistakes here and in previous chapters though, and they won't be caught by a spell-checker ("fir" instead of "for", for example). For a moment there, I was hopeful that we wouldn't have to deal with Sai (although, seeing how quickly things are moving, I guess we won't have to worry about him that much). |
| Viridian 2007-07-16 ch 4, | abuseI'm glad you took the time to show a bit about Naruto's development during the time jump. His fear of girls was a bit funny, but I'm glad I can respect the sentiments that have been holding him back. |