I loved it! :D

Aww! Cute fluffiness FTW! I absolutely LOVED this!

Oh, LOVE you! Your works are amazing! I just went and read the bonus chap that went with this one and I lurved it! Hm, when you described Jak wearing his white under tee, I got the lovliest mental pic of Jak with his short hair-do with the white tee, the khaki pants, and white socks (Just white socks mind you, no boots!), and I must say, casual Jak has some extreme appeal *wiggles eyebrows* Once again I must tell you what an awesome author you are! (And you write so fast, I can't believe you only started writing on in February! O.O)

Fantastic story! I will read the Razer X Keira X Jak one tomorrow, but for now, you have kept me up way too late w/ your scrumptious stories my dear!

C.I.C.

I hope you do make bouns chapter for this storie PRETTY PLEASE. Also you next storie should have humor. keep up the good work.

Wonderfully well written. Your M chapter reminded me of a romance novel, not just more porn and inspired me to go through and read the rest of the story. Great work!

To answer your question the term “Lemon” started being used to describe hentai anime and fan fiction after Project A-Ko released there “Cream Lemon” series of anime, short hentai based stories that came out in the 1985 and thus lemon became synonymous with hentai. I read that in a guide book for Japan believe it or not.

Write more! ...Maybe A Torn and Ashe romance for a fangirl?Wink nudge

That was funny about his shirts. Very good story. First scene I have ever read like that...congradulations, if you want them. Totally awesome story! XD

Ahh, you wrote a lemon! And it was good! I liked that cutesy fluff in both the chapters, the mint ice cream description was drool worthy! Heheh nice romance and you really can write a lemon with style.

like like I do, I always wonder how and or when he gets his new looks...interesting lmao, not really a chap I expected from you but ah what the hell? and now as much as I'd love to rant on and on and on and ON about how I love your story but I must now read the next one YAY...y'know wouldn't hurt to just write a long story just to keep working on, or writeihng really short storys and billion's of them...ether way I'm happy reading and reviewing them . anyway your fathful minion fan and reviewer...#.

I'm Avacado Platypus, and I approve of this story.

:D! Great job. I really enjoyed it. :)

that was very good, a breath of fresh air on this site where everyone messes with the pairings, and I once saw a story where Jak and Krew were sexual partners. *shudder* and that was one of the best and most emotional stories I've read, well done.

ME LIKIE!

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Keep up the good work!

GMB

Eheheh I asked it first :P :P

I'm soo evil ...lol

Whoa you did a great job..really, congratulations I loved this :)

GREAT JOB!

Torn didn't take long to win back did he? Hehheh. I would say the exact same as I did in the other review emphasising the believableness and romance. Everyone is very in character and this is how I'd exactly expect both of their relationships to be. Well Done!

Hi, sorry I'm late! Nice to see your stories again RenjiLuvah and Okay heres my comments. Your dialogue is great, your emotion is great, your romance is great and your writing is good and clear. You could use more description if you want but the clarity of the writing really makes the scenes easy to imagine. You are doing a real nice job fillin in these gaps and now I'm off to read the next 2 chapters.

lol thats a very good idea waiting til the interesting parts...wait what could be more interesting then these chap's...O.O I can't wait to find out! btw I think the rateing is fine, but if you feel comfortable rateing it higher then do so if you want . anyway great chap, I realy like the last one too, later I might review it anyway for fun and coz I really loved it lol... and I'm sure you have more minions then you think :) your fan worshiper and minion...#.