I don't know why you don't have more reviews, this was simply adorable and seemed very in character for all involved. Please keep writing. Blessed be. -The Aqua Mirror?

Aw! This story was really excellent! And I just LOVE how you managed to capture Yuki's and Shuichi's characters so well! X3 The whole misunderstanding thing was very realistic - but I think what made it the most realistic was the way Yuki never found out about Shuichi's decision to read his book. It shows that not EVERY detail is always cleared up in real life. I thought that was one of the best parts. So, overall, great job! Heh. Loved this story!

What a beautiful and sadly underrated story.
Great composition and grammar.
You deserve more reviews!

His first love letter from Yuki? Only until he reads Yuki's books of course and understands the underlying messages. :)

Eh, ok, fluffy chapter. *grin* Who's complaining though? It wasn't overdone, thank goodness. A good conclusion, not really concluding anything but rather throwing readers' visions into the future of their relationship.

Yikes, I just saw the publishing dates for this story. Six days?! Christ, this was much too good of a fanfiction to have been drenched out in a measly six days. And believe it or not, I'll stop here. :) Very very well done.

*wince* There was a spoiler here, wasn't there? There must be a story behind Kitazawa Yuki. Eh, I oughta be used to being a spoiler-magnet.

Amusing how Tohma called Yuki "brother" several times earlier in Yuki's "visit," then dropped off to just referring to him as "Yuki," until of course Yuki deliberately threw their actual relationship into Tohma's face. Which was very bittersweet. *grimace*

Some more quotations:

"Yuki was like some wounded wild animal that grew hostile with fear when someone drew near to help bandage him." Lovely description, not to mention connection. Yuki either has had a delightful past or he's just a character every writer dreams of exploring.

"Even once all the ash had fallen from his hand-rolled cigarette, his thumb kept flicking the opposite end as if trying to shake more off." Hehe. Never saw a better portrayal of denial.

"Could it be that this was the issue that was bothering Yuki? Had that novel been a thinly-veiled autobiography of sorts? A 300-page love letter meant for Shuichi to read between the lines?" This is a little cliched... but situates perfectly with Yuki's character. It was mentioned that he isn't very good with words verbally; it makes sense that he'd resort to writing. Interesting that he's a romance novelist, of all professions to choose. *grin* I can't say it enough; you've really brought out his character.

"Tohma took a ginger sip of his liquor, then set it down as delicately as if he were in a formal tea ceremony." Tohma's change in demeanor here is fabulous. He seems to be rather polished and sophisticated to begin with, but this short description of him at this instance displays his sudden turn to caution. Although, it's worth wondering if he's not always rather cautious around Yuki.

Dear God, this is too long. I'll limit myself to a couple sentences next time. Sorry.

I wish I could write like this. :) First chapter only and I'm hooked. Just as in Rhythm, you've managed to drag out the characters' consciousness and their deeper dimensions--well, Yuki's in this case. And I'd have thought he would be difficult to portray in first person.

So many gems in here, I'll limit myself to listing two:

"How dare Shuichi accuse him of being selfish?" The entire theme of the chapter (and the story, I expect?) was Shuishi's childish self-absorption, but this outburst really drove it home.

"The boy tensed, eyes cringed shut, not regretting his harsh words, just fearing Yuki’s reaction." Just...wow. I think most writers would gloss over Shuichi's reaction, leaving it at him cringing. But the phrases coming after that expresses Yuki's perceptive understanding of his lover's nature and really makes the readers empathize with Yuki more. One of the moments that makes readers go "Ah, so that's why..." Fantastic.

Technical stuff, if wanted: "He wanted to ask Shuichi why he’d never taken an interest in I his /I life and art." *laugh* If you want to go back and redo the italics.

Aw So cute!! =3..To bad its over tho...Id like more fluff ^^

Beautiful. I had expected the entire story to be longer, but this also suits me just fine *lazy* haha. I would have liked a scene where Yuki discovered Shuichi trying to muddle his way through his books though, but meh. ^_^ Great job.

Aww, so cute! I loved the way that Yuki acted when Shu came home! Awesome work!

Oh!? Shuichi can't read kanji? That was a suprise. I thought this thing Shuichi not talking about Yukis books were 'cause Yuki always says they're crap and he would feel stupid saying that they're great after Yuki has insulted them. But this is a great fic! 'Hope you update soon! ^_^

Aww, this story is so cute! Please update soon!!

Oh yeah! This rocks! Hey is there only two chapters? It's safe to end it here but I think you should do more. ^_^ Please do more! :D

BRILLIANT! You absolutely MUST write more! I'll cheer for you. C: BTW, will this be romance? The genre says just drama/general... I'd love a little romance *is a fluff sucker*.