Reviews for Identity: Subject to Change

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King Golden 2008-05-23 ch 12,	abuseSenzai: blinks Did... did General-sama just update? Did she really? -_- lol indeed, but I think she forgot to look over the chap a bit, first sentence is there twice. No biggie tho, just glad to see she does exist and my buddy isn't a ghost ^_^ You know, I actually never paid it that much attention, but I actually like the song infusion, it blended so perfectly with the emotions you were playing with... liked the last installment's focus around it, seeing as Like Toy Soldiers is one of my fav songs period. Serori: You say that as if constantly listening to that insane human is a good thing. ... hey... Eminem is a great artist... but I'll give you the insane part. -_- To this chapter in particular... I liked the contrast you were working with Nessa, her desire to move on with her life being pretty much beaten into a corner by her desire to be with Roux... someone who is her enemy now. But it is this that eventually makes her, forgive the expression lol, man up and accept her new responsibilities. Roux's trouble with English is lmao+rofl worthy... smh lol English is so hard for foreigners to learn, much less master. I really like that aspect alot, many writers(including myself) make the speech transition for aliens effortless, its good to see an alien struggling with it. Senzai: Ehh, Roux is just not smart enough, that's all it is. Serori: Boy, you couldn't speak OUR language until you were- Senzai: You always gotta side with them, don't you... Well anyway, great chapter my friend, enjoyed reading it. Sorry it took me so long to get to this, gotta check my e-mails more often lol. Good to see ya back. Yes, G-chan indeed. lol - KG p.s. yeah, a Thundriao bio would be nice, thank you ma'am.. lol
King Golden 2007-07-30 ch 11,	abuseWow.. that was deep. The experiment scene was pretty gruesome, docs came off really callous... You deff got what you were going for here... that ending was both sad & touching. Really liked the whole chapter... Title? Perhaps 'The Broken Toy'... an allusion to TS, since the chap itself goes back to it... But eh, its been 2 months, I think you're leaving it be.. lol Anyway, great chap G-Chan, keep it up. ~ The King
The Tactician 2007-06-28 ch 11, anon.	abuse...wow. TT loves the banana phone song!! Ring ring ring ring ring ring ring, bananaphone! Yay! Hmm. The boxers conversation? Is this Roux's perverted revenge for the even more perverted shower scene earlier? But yeah, creepish. I see why Earth has a really cruddy interstellar tourist business. I think I'll put that doctor on my "fictional people to kill" list. Thundriao's "midnight-gloved hand" struck me as a little odd. I know what you're trying to say, of course, but it sounds strange. Possibly because midnight is thought of as a time of day moreso than a color... Hmm, in the third last line of the operation paragraph, you have "What it hell?" :P Anyway, good chapter, made me want to kick something. ^^ I'm slowly catching up on my reviewing! Luck, TT
Blusher 2007-04-12 ch 10, anon.	abuseu might be angry but get caught up in a fic and then there is no update for a month or more and see how u feel!
King Golden 2007-04-11 ch 10,	abuseI don't see any such foul review... I'm assuming you deleted it. All the better then, you can't let morons get to you... "A wise man once said don't argue with fools, because people from a distance can't tell who is who." Sides, Senzai & the crew woulda been at his/her throat, no doubt. Senzai: Yeah! Death to foul-reviewing morons!! ANYHOO... that said... The last chapter was great, I liked the dream sequence, the interaction between Roux & his dad... Especially the candle scene... The last scene was kinda touching too, really showed the bond between T & Roux... As for this chapter... Thrice = PURE Saiyajin. Still my fav character out of your lot. Despite what you may think, I'm not that quick on the uptake if Nessa becoming General was obvious... Mighta been obvious too lol, but I didn't see it coming... Maybe because I've been out of the loop for a while. Yup, great set of chapters my friend. Keep that good stuff coming Gen... ~ The King
Blusher 2007-04-11 ch 9, anon.	abuseU know u do this every time? get people wrapped up in a world then just discontinue? thats fucked up . right now i'm tempted to call u a pussyhole yes i'm that mad now!
The Tactician 2007-01-01 ch 1, anon.	abusehisses Oh no you don't, General! Hatake's MINE. glitterMINE!sparkle He lives in my sock/underwear drawer, and I've got a strong feeling that he won't want to be leaving any time soon. smirk If it'll make you feel better, maybe he'll review with me on occasion...I need a voice in my head to argue with too, you know. Kakashi: using TT's underwear as a bookmark Yo. ^/
The Tactician 2006-12-27 ch 9, anon.	abuseMerry Christmas! Obviously you've got holiday fever... poking Thrice I don't know...you look a bit like a "Steel Grey" or maybe "Silver Lining"... cackles So I have to ask...did this Rohan I keep hearing so much about have something to do with the whole 'pedofile' scene? wink wink Next thing we know, Thundy will like Boldy's son better than the king himself...muahahaha... Those four year olds are acting pretty mature for...well, four year olds...Back away slowly, TT, back away slowly...runs Luck, TT
Lancetree 2006-12-22 ch 9,	abuseTairo: BWAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Roux and Thrice, sitting in a tree! LT: Ignore the idiot. This is getting better. It's good to finally meet Roux's mother... unless we met her before, which I doubt... but then again... ACK! Too confusing! Tairo: K-I-S-S-I-N-G! Whack OW!
King Golden 2006-11-19 ch 8,	abuseSenzai: Curse me will you?! Wait till I unleash Kyuubi's power! o.O? Senzai: Sorry... Just watched A Naruto marathon... Its like a deeper, more character developing style of DBZ... Its growing on me ^_^ Anyhoo... That ending caught me off guard.. She lives?? Wosh... Re-snagged my interest... Not that you lost it, I've just been away a while.. Keep writing Gen!
The Tactician 2006-10-02 ch 8, anon.	abuseTruken! Hmm, emu sized, eh?...TT now has a pet Truken. With a saddle. That I can ride around and terrorize bad OCs with. nod nod So, Meytallia's alive, eh? Tres interessant... Nice description in the Vanessa part. And...wow. Little Veggie crying? I'd be tempted to think he was faking, just because of that...but then again, maybe Freiza isn't quite as cynical as myself. Mmeh. Oh yeah, and Fun Facts TT here, with a bit of useless information... "Roux" is actually either a real world manufacturer of hair products or a salon-type business. I didn't end up knowing which, but...They're the only ones I've ever seen that included various shades of gray in their color selection. Odd, eh? Maybe Thrice isn't a natural..uh..silver-ette? Luck, TT rides Truken off into the sunset
King Golden 2006-06-21 ch 7,	abuseLike father like son... A terrible path to follow though... Serori: Terrible indeed. But the Saiyajins that encountered Frieza have all been warped by the horrible circumstances... Accursed reptile! May your death be a slow and painful one... Senzai: Vanessa loves Roux... I say it now! Yeah, I said it! And I say... It will become mutual! And I stand by this! Do something about it Roux! Yeah, you can't! Ha ha! Know why? Cuz I'm the King and you know better! Serori: Anyway... I praise you Vegeta for your determination... Stand strong young prince. Well, keep up the good work General! Off I go to read yet more stories...
Sayeh 2006-06-14 ch 7,	abuseCool story ^_^ btw, I updated Saiyan Understandings chapter 7!
SomeGuy2009 2006-06-13 ch 7,	abuseUgh...finally got time enough to get around to reading this chapter... Summer has been hectic so far... I MISS SCHOOL! Zephyr: ...You're insane... You think I am. At least you have something to look forward to in your summer. Raises eyebrows Zephyr: ...What are you saying... Absolutely nothing! Now, on to reading! "Sighing bitterly, the green-eyed teen caught a glimpse of her herself in the mirror." Zephyr: ...I still bet her eyes are really pretty... Terra: That's because they are green... Zephyr: Glares at Terra then stares back off into space, obviously day dreaming Terra: ...You're just jealous of Roux! Zephyr: ...The kumquat isn't even her, the idiot... Terra: ...sigh... "'Garo.' He hissed, opening the fridge. 'Hasn’t Thundriao eaten anything yet?'" ...er...Garo? What the crap does that mean?! Other than that...He should be lower case! UGH! Falls Over Zephyr: ...You know...you drive him crazy with that, so he strives to make my story as correct as possible...thanks! My story ends up being the good one! YAY! Of his stories that is...not yours. Yours are far better than anything HE can write... Lifting himself up Hey...remember...I rule your life... If I want you to be hurt, I can make it so! Don't get on my bad side! Zephyr: Whimpers then walks away "...he grabbed a leg of what he assumed was truken, sniffing it in inspection." I'm guessing truken is like chicken or something?... I don't understand Generalese! "Finally, he discovered a cozy position, sliding his hand up underneath the pillow as he often did when he slept." I do that same exact thing! That's the ONLY way I can sleep comfortably that doesn't have anything to do with sticking my nose in between the bed and the wall...don't ask... Go Roux! "The prince ran his fingers across the sharp blade, hissing when he pricked his index." Zephyr: This piqued my interest... Um...can't Thundriao shoot beams outta his hands? Why the hell does he need a sword?! That makes no sense!... He needs it to fight off all of the homophobes, like Bush! Zephyr: ...Why...me... "'Thank you gods…you know me too well.' An insane smile landed upon his lips, and the prince eyed his left arm dangerously..." ...He must inherit the retarded method of hurting yourself for the crap of it from Boldgrend... I swear...all Relin's are idiots on the inside... "His other hand glided down her ribs, making her form shiver." Zephyr: ...lucky bastard... Erin: Slaps Zephyr I don't even know HOW I put up with you! Stomps off in an angry rage Zephyr: ...what? Wait! SWEETIE! Chases after her "'...Saiyans are not ones for lengthy, wordy expressions of regret. We let our actions speak for us.'" In My funny voice Hm... Lifts eyebrow in suspicion What kind of actions, Roux? Snickers "'Like I said, ‘Nessa...'" You have pet names for EVERY one of your OC's! It's a wonder they don't go on strike!...not that they could...shut up... "Warmth suddenly exploded into her mouth as the warrior brought his chiseled lips to hers." YES! I LOVE THIS PART! W00T! Zephyr: No Stops suddenly and flinches as Erin glares at him I mean...er...what a loss for girls everywhere... Erin: Exactly Smiles in self-accomplishment "'Ah...’Nessa...' His sturdy frame leaned into her more wiry one as she found his tail." I still think that it's supposed to hurt and paralyze saiyans when someone grabs their tail... Maybe I just confused something with the Garthians and the Vegetans... Wanna clear it up for me? "He crushed his mouth to hers again, this time slipping his devious tongue, one he had stuck out at her so many times, into her mouth. Groaning, she let him explore, letting her hands wander back to his strong shoulder blades. Feeling playful, she batted her tongue out against his, insinuating a sharp, amused growl from the boy. Slowly, he drew back, closing their open-mouthed kiss into a far more gentle expression." That whole paragraph right there, General...wow...that sounds like one of MY romance scenes. I mean, not MINE, but sounds like something I'd write! I'm so proud! You deserve a hug! Remind me next time I see you. Oh yeah, good job! "Never...I’ll kill him before that ever happens...” Wow...what a mood killer... Anyways, I absolutely adore that pairing, as you know, and that scene there was the icing on the cake! I like how you portrayed everything and you need to do it more often! =P Good job. "'Oh release...' He muttered, stroking his mutilated left arm. 'Release, so bittersweet...'" I seriously doubt I'm using this right, but he's a...ningen? It's something like that, right? Whatever...he's an idiot... "'You think you are so perfect, matchless enough to ignore your own blatant flaws. Feh, when will you understand Roux? Self-damage is nothing but a fruitless expression of stupidity and hate...'" You know, you better put that quote into your favorite quotes part, under the serious quotes. That's something that some people in this world should know. It's just a little wrong...but anyways...really really really good quote there... "Horrorstruck, the Prince ripped his head from the fortress of his arms, only to find Thundriao’s twisted expression of fury and concern snarling down at him." Er...he took that well...the whole Thundy looking down on him thingy... I woulda been crapping my pants, but that's just me... "Raditz’s cheeks were flushed a bright red, his hedgehog-like hair flared out with his aura." I read that sentence, and the first thing that popped into my head was...SONIC! I LOVE that game! I think I'm gonna play that after I finish this. Okay...last thing I need to say is... YOU ENJOY TORTURING PEOPLE! YOU FREAK! What did these poor OC's ever do to you? Huh? You make kill off one's mum and his maid, kill one, make one attempt suicide, make one hate his brother, and make one sound like the monkey off of Lion King! What did any of them ever do to you?! Anyways...ranting is fun... Well, now that this chapter is down, I'm going to go play some Sonic. I'll talk to you hopefully soon, General. 'Till then, xXRobertXx
The Tactician 2006-06-08 ch 7, anon.	abuseinnocent grin General, do you have major psyciatric problems? ducks Wahaha, The Tactician is alive and ready to review! I haven't reveiwed for so long, I seem to remember something I wanted to comment on ages ago...eh, I'll figure it out by the time I finish rambling about this lovely new installment, simply titled "Oath". :P You know, I think I just about choked on - well, nothing really, but that's beside the point - while reading your romance scene. I had someohow gotten the idea in my head that it was supposed to be a flashback and well, was I ever surprised! Scared me for a moment or two. Tsk, tsk, we never said the young Relin was smart now, did we? I must agree with Thrice's quote. I'm pretty sure that was Thrice, anyway. Sounded like something he'd say. So I have to ask, just what is truken? I assume some weird Saiyan food, but I just must know...hah. I rather liked the last part between Veggie and Co...touching sniff Not that Vegeta 'hates' Roux now, how Veggie and Raditz came to their little agreement. Hmm, I hope Veggies not planning on ditching the plan due to this new episode of sibling rivalry. I missed reading your writing, so I rather enjoyed this chapter. The scattered-ness was actually good - I'm a fan of organized chaos. You know, Oath isn't that bad of a title...I mean, both Vegeta and Vanessa are making vows against Roux...hehe. Oh yeah, and I'm curious to know what's on Roux's computer...hmm.. Now onto a few other random comments... I have to say it..."Down with the Sickness" is by Disturbed. T'was on your profile. ^^ Okay, so I was bored one day, and happened to pop by your profile to see if anything was updated. I never actually go to the categories pages anymore...I've memorized your author number, so I just type in the URL and go straight to your profile. Can't use bookmarks(long story) and I'm too lazy to click all those links every time. Anyway, I happened to notice an interesting allusion to something called "Dangerously Close". I do believe I laughed my head off. You must post it on completion, despite Boldy and Thundy's obvious horror. I'm no crazy yaoi fangirl or nothing, far from it, but I would find that very amusing. crazy laughter Well, that's all for now...I will read your Blue Blood update later. ^^ Luck, TT

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