Whee! New Pokemon are great. I love Kamon's back story so far. It's really interesting. Some cc, the battles are a little lacking. Attacks such as growl seem irrelevant in a written battle. Instead write how the growl lowers attack, such as lower a Pokemon's confidence or something that might be relative. You also have a few grammatical errors such as, "Lately, in the winter, she suffered pneumonia, and died a week later, her health declining." Both the order of events listed and tense make things a little confusing. Also, "I'm not a Rich Boy, and Crystal here isn't a Lady!" is a little awkward. The part about Crystal seems more like an insult. XD I do like the story so far though.

Kamon seems really, nice. XD A little constructive criticism, it's rather awkward that you have a character outright saying he, "... didn't abuse [his Pokemon] in any way." Also, it's a lot better for the reader if you show, not tell. What I mean is, use more description. Don't outrigt tell us how people feel or what their personality will be like. Give us actions and mannerisms. Also, does Crystal already know Kamon? She talks like she knows him. Anyways, interesting story thus far.

Hmm, interesting take on the characters. I take it Duncan is the hero character and Kamon the rival?

Pretty good ending to a great story! Bravo!

Wow, Celebi rewound time to save them, thats pretty cool! Good chapter!

Oh Lorelei got killed? I never liked her as an elite four member, but having her get killed is pretty harsh, especially without even calling out any of her pokemon.

I sense a battle brewing! Pretty good story so far, I wonder how the fight will play out?

I wonder what pokemon the color triad has anyways? Must be some very powerful pokemon if they could take down team rocket!

Oh geez, Sandy and Conner are a BAD bunch! I hope Kamon and his friends will be ok!

I wonder where giovonni went off to to train? Or maybe he's just not coming back to team rocket, perhaps he doesn't want any more of it. Good chapter!

Both Clair AND Lance? This is getting interesting...

You actually put a face on these team rocket grunts and scientists, not many people do that in their fics. I think thats a pretty good idea actually! Good chapter!

Now they met Lance, if this story is anything like they game, they will kick butt!

I wonder how they are going to get the word out to giovonni that they kidnapped his son? Nice chapter!

Training 24 hours a day!? Someones going to be sleep-deprived and a LITTLE cranky!