Good start, then you leave us hanging after only two chapters, lol -_-.

FFS! I'm more than tempted to hijack some of your ideas for my own stories.

Such a good start and a good idea. Appears dead...?

This is very good. I hope you get a chance to work on it.

G'Day Mate

just a quick note I really like this one well written and would like to see it continued if you can. Hell i lkie all your stuff so keep up the great work

I like this one too! I'm liking your way of doing things. *chuckles* Please update soon.

hope you write more soon, it is a promising story and I want to know what happens next.

M, crossovery goodness. I like your writing a lot, and your ideas are usually fantastic and always imaginative. But most of all, I love your characterizations. I'm a sucker for sweet Ranma and a Nabiki who lives for her family, it's true. I also really like how you've set up Soun here, as a guy who really, truly loves his daughters, but is fairly hapless in the face of the vengeful fury of righteousness that is Nodoka. Also, now I'm going to waste time that could be spent on my thesis wondering if Tofu is some super-secret evil general.

This is a scenario which could work even with a Nabiki who was a cold hearted mercenary who wasn't helping her family, although canon Nabiki does display some sense of family honor. If Kasumi was put into a coma and Nabiki blinded and cast out of the clan, even mercenary!Nabiki would change, not the least by being forced to accept help. And since it is part of Ranma's nature to help those in distress and Nabiki is part of his so to speak family, I can easily accept him coming to her aid even against the wishes of his parents. He doesn't respect his father and his mother is a near stranger who also wants to control his life in some important respects. So you might consider eliminating the overt presentation of helpful!Nabiki and make the story more general to different views of Nabiki

'After all, not one damn fiancée was of the “ask questions first” persuasion.' He's probably right about a Haruka although she would find a sex-switching fiancee the most acceptable if she was forced to have one, but Hotaru would be willing to listen to him. She's been the target of others because of being different and she could empathize with him; and she probably isn't boy crazy likely some of the inners.

I'd say Ranma was just being paranoid, but truthfully
that's pretty much the way his life runs. Excellent work.

Tight prose, believable (if a bit extreme) plot departure, good charecterizations...

and then you added sailor moon to the equasion. Sigh.

Well, good luck with that.

Nice job. Keep up the good work.

Best,
~JohnnyG

very good

great work

Excellent part here, and can't wait to see how this goes, and what happens to all concerned, as well as what might be up with Kasumi's coma.

really good but umm do you think you could work on duality a little more please.