Heartbreaking!

'Some compassionate divine force had let you live longer than you should have, and I was eternally grateful to hear your heartbeat among our soft, muffled cries.' Beautiful. Heart-breaking.

'Dying is easy. It's living without you that takes all my courage.' Indeed.

I loved this story. Excellent work.

damn it all I can't...sob..stop crying...sob..sob...so sad.

Karusu-hime

This is incredible! You should write more. Some of the sentences remdind me of Latin poets.

oh.my.god. You made me cry w/this. That was so beautiful and so sad. Very well done.

Oh. That was really emotional. But do you think they would have had that long? Who knows, maybe there's something to do with the definition. I'm such a sucker for unrequitted love. It's so beautiful. Well, it is in words. I doubt it's so much fun in real life. Besides the point, i know. Anyway, love the story, very well written. Thanks.

Scarlet

Oh my god.

I am speechless.

There was so much here - not only the writing form, but the way it flowed, how you melded emotions into the words - I applaud it.

WOW this is a beautifully written oneshot!! The story flowed gracefully and the reader was sucked into the inner turmoil struggle of the characters! I felt the helplessness, the longing, the love for another person and most of all I UNDERSTOOD. All i can do i applaud you for writting such a lovely and deep oneshot ^_^